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Postby RedRose » Sat Oct 09, 2004 12:08 am

my ending for the story is so bad.... :cry: :cry: :cry:

I should delete it? hehe
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Postby RedRose » Sat Oct 09, 2004 2:29 am

I have deleted my ending then, since you guys didn't love it :lol:
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Postby Dixie » Sat Oct 09, 2004 10:25 am

Ohhh!! Why did you do that?? :evil:
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Postby RedRose » Sat Oct 09, 2004 10:46 am

coz that ending was messing up the nice story :lol: :lol: :lol:
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Postby Dixie » Sat Oct 09, 2004 11:51 am

But it's good to have options :D
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Postby caiqinqian » Wed Oct 20, 2004 7:48 am

The story is sad,should I change the end:

It's the 100th days. Peter and Tina are sitting in the park which they went 100 days before.They keep silence just gazing into the grassplot,and then:

TINA: This morning, when I realized that it's the last day for our game,I felt so sad that I didn't want to get up...

PRTER:But, everythings will be over.I think it's the time to end this game.

Tina was sad,she can't understand why peter was so cold.Originally,she believed that they brought happy to each otherand sometimes she even think it will be good if peter become her real boyfriend.She asked:"Peter,don't you think we have a good time?I cherish everyday we've spent."

PETER: I don't think it's need to cherish,just let it pass.

Tina was so sad that she nearly weep and then
PETER :"I have a plan.A new game will be started."

TINA:A new game?

PETER:"yes, a new game." Peter took out a small box from his pocket and then fell on his knees in front of Tina , said:
"Tina, I hope you can play a new game with me. In that game,u are my wife and I will play a role of a good husband. the game time is the remainder of our lives.Do you want to accept it?"


The final is not need to write,I think everybody has the answer.
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Postby francine » Wed Oct 20, 2004 3:26 pm

RedRose wrote:I have deleted my ending then, since you guys didn't love it :lol:

no! don't delete it! i appreciate it! don't please. :? :(
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