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Her Broken Christmas.

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Her Broken Christmas.

Postby letsjam » Sun Dec 31, 2006 12:21 pm

"NICEST POST OF THE MONTH"


My poem.

Her Broken Christmas.

What happened to her?
This is so weird –
She doesn’t feel the magic on Christmas
Anymore.
Maybe she is a grown up
Already,
But under this makeup and tears
You can see what she really feels inside.
It’s hard to stay strong
when nothing’s right and
everything’s wrong.
She runs away feeling worthless.
It happens often.
You won’t see the truth in her eyes
Because of her charming smile.
You don’t even know her hidden fears and pain.
She wishes she had never dreamt at all,
It all is useless and won’t ever come true,
She knows.
She lost her faith in love.
You stabbed her in the heart.
Isn’t it enough?
People disappoint her,
and world is not perfect at all.
Only that teddy bear was there for her,
so she could hug it and cry to it and talk to it.
She always expects to lose.
If she talks and laughs too hard
It means she tries to forget
her loneliness and sorrow.

Well I am the girl
“who always smiled
even when her heart was broken
and
the one who could always brighten up your day
even if she couldn't brighten her own”.

And now I just want to be left alone
To cry.

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Postby Oriani » Sun Dec 31, 2006 5:05 pm

This poem touched my heart :oops:

You know what? It seems it was made for me...
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Postby letsjam » Mon Jan 01, 2007 4:21 am

thank you.
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Postby Oriani » Tue Jan 16, 2007 12:53 pm

letsjam wrote:thank you.


You're welcome! I'd like to write something like that for my Poetry slam for next Friday! I think I will take some ideas from yours!! It's really nice!
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Postby feanor » Tue Jan 16, 2007 3:00 pm

letsjam, you r really good at writing. i remember other poems of yours and i liked them all, but for me, this one is the best. i like your melancholy.
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Postby babara » Tue Jan 16, 2007 4:59 pm

But under this makeup and tears
You can see what she really feels inside.
It’s hard to stay strong
when nothing’s right and
everything’s wrong.
She runs away feeling worthless.
It happens often.
You won’t see the truth in her eyes
Because of her charming smile.
You don’t even know her hidden fears and pain.
She wishes she had never dreamt at all,
It all is useless and won’t ever come true,
She knows.
She lost her faith in love.



I like this...makes me profound. :)
But this all is great also.
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Postby Oriani » Tue Jan 16, 2007 6:56 pm

I liked because, honestly it seems it was written for me.. like that the writer knew about me and decided to write about how broken Xmas was! Like mine!
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Postby babara » Wed Jan 17, 2007 5:11 am

Oriani wrote:I liked because, honestly it seems it was written for me.. like that the writer knew about me and decided to write about how broken Xmas was! Like mine!


Oh dear...X'mas was broken like yours? How was it?
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Postby letsjam » Wed Jan 17, 2007 5:39 am

Thanks guys.

babara wrote:
Oriani wrote:I liked because, honestly it seems it was written for me.. like that the writer knew about me and decided to write about how broken Xmas was! Like mine!


Oh dear...X'mas was broken like yours? How was it?


Well it means she was lonely/depressed, etc. So her Christmas was broken. Like mine
XD
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Postby Oriani » Wed Jan 17, 2007 6:54 pm

letsjam wrote:Thanks guys.

babara wrote:
Oriani wrote:I liked because, honestly it seems it was written for me.. like that the writer knew about me and decided to write about how broken Xmas was! Like mine!


Oh dear...X'mas was broken like yours? How was it?


Well it means she was lonely/depressed, etc. So her Christmas was broken. Like mine
XD

Yes, actually I was depressed! :cry:
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