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eternity

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eternity

Postby nightwish » Mon Jul 16, 2007 4:51 pm

hello there!

this is one of my poems,
I decided to share it with you
so hope you'll like it
I'm waiting for your criticism.


let the rhythm leads you
just follow my steps,
we will walk together
and ride the winds
fly through the melody of our music,
feel the deep beat, and dream
release the pain that lives inside,
forget about the world
just "listen to your heart"
and travel through your imagination to another place
where you can hear the whispers and feel the silent of a glory moment
you can hide between the shadows of your mind
and immerge into world of silence
all you can hear is the tempo of your heart
all you can feel is the wild winds caress your shoulders

I see you there
Sitting in the middle of nowhere
Hearing a lullaby
I can feel the dance of your spirit, spinning in empty
Waiting for a new song to hear
Song of your heart
Beating again

Spread your wings
And fly
Fly away
Above this high sky to the everlasting
I'll give you all of my time
Make some changes and live till the end,
You'll feel me;
In the unseen shadows
In every breath you take
And you'll hear my voice through the rhythm of our music

Here it comes, I can hear it nearby
The echo of a new playing song
It's all waiting for you
No more shadows of doubt
'cause a red rose have bloomed
It's a trace of a new life
Live these timeless moments
And believe…believe in eternity.


best regards
Nightwish:) ;)
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Postby nightwish » Wed Jul 18, 2007 9:41 am

no one liked my poem or it's not good enough? :( :cry:
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Postby nightwish » Thu Jul 19, 2007 8:34 am

first of all, thank you I'm glad that you liked my poem and I appreciate that.

second of all, yeah I do believe of what I wrote.
It seems to me that you didn't understand the point of the poem, you just looked at the words not the inner meaning, and because of that you said it's a mysterious.

but anyway thank you :!:
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Postby Wildwolf » Thu Jul 19, 2007 9:48 am

Uhm, very nice but the mystery'll appear when you meet who understant you, and that person can be your best friend. Everyone will like your poem, I believe that! :D :D :D
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Postby nightwish » Sat Jul 21, 2007 8:26 pm

thanks anaway
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Postby Vega » Wed Aug 01, 2007 6:41 pm

I have just read your poem. It's really what I like. :D

Especially this part:

Spread your wings
And fly
Fly away
Above this high sky to the everlasting
I'll give you all of my time
Make some changes and live till the end,
You'll feel me;
In the unseen shadows
In every breath you take
And you'll hear my voice through the rhythm of our music
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Postby lluviax » Wed Aug 01, 2007 9:56 pm

Hello nightwish
I read your poem , and I think that your poem is very beautiful, and I think that you have much talent.
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Postby nightwish » Thu Aug 02, 2007 3:17 pm

thanks, I'm glad that you liked it! :)
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Hmmmm.....

Postby baobao » Thu Aug 02, 2007 3:43 pm

Hhmmmm...I really impress with you all guys who make poem.It so wonderful..Because honestly it's hard for me to think a fresh genuine poetry...Good luck^^
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