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Flowers

Postby Sunnypk » Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:22 am

FLOWERS

Flower is my friend.
Because when I feel myself sad.
I open my books.
Where you fragrance my feeling.
You are an only one.
Who knows about my sorrows?
You are a true friend.
Because you participate always in my joys and sorrows.
You are lovely dear.
A feeling of a good friend always comes in my heart.
When I remember you in my dear's hand.
When she looks you in love.
There is a expressions for me.
That's why I love you most.
Because you are my dears love.
Last edited by Sunnypk on Mon Feb 18, 2008 10:33 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Flowers

Postby shakespear » Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:55 am

Your poem "Flowers" is good but you have some mistakes .
You say"a only one" ....... You have to say " an only one "
You say"who know " ....... You have to say " who knows"
You say"always come" ....... You have to say " always comes "
You say"a expression" ....... You have to say " an expression "
my friend you have good idea and expression so don`t stop and go on , good luck.
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Re: Flowers

Postby Sunnypk » Mon Feb 18, 2008 12:08 pm

thanks shakespear I don't know how can these common mistakes be done by me. I really had not checked it out again for my satisfactory

I have edited my mistakes:)
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Re: Flowers

Postby sweets » Mon Feb 18, 2008 3:05 pm

so nice to adress a peom for flowers :)
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Re: Flowers

Postby Sunnypk » Mon Feb 18, 2008 6:01 pm

sweets wrote:so nice to adress a peom for flowers :)



thanks "sweets" It's my just first attempt which I have shared with you
thanks for that humble reply:)
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Re: Flowers

Postby Snowy* » Sat Apr 12, 2008 10:03 am

Nice poem..
What a lucky friend you have !!!
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Re: Flowers

Postby nancywu » Mon Apr 14, 2008 3:09 am

nice done, i can also feel that kind of affection.
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Re: Flowers

Postby Sunnypk » Mon Apr 14, 2008 3:10 am

Snowy* wrote:Nice poem..
What a lucky friend you have !!!


Thanks dear snowy* for liking it

Some lines are arising in my mind so want to share with you

"New friends may be a poem, but old friends are alphabet because you will need them to read poem"
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Re: Flowers

Postby Snowy* » Mon Apr 14, 2008 3:35 pm

Sunnypk wrote:
Snowy* wrote:Nice poem..
What a lucky friend you have !!!


Thanks dear snowy* for liking it

Some lines are arising in my mind so want to share with you

"New friends may be a poem, but old friends are alphabet because you will need them to read poem"








THANKS :oops: :oops:
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Re: Flowers

Postby Sunnypk » Mon Apr 14, 2008 7:08 pm

Snowy* wrote:
Sunnypk wrote:
Snowy* wrote:Nice poem..
What a lucky friend you have !!!


Thanks dear snowy* for liking it

Some lines are arising in my mind so want to share with you

"New friends may be a poem, but old friends are alphabet because you will need them to read poem"


THANKS :oops: :oops:


but untill I am looking forward to lucky friends here. I think some of the members don't have trust at me yet? :(
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