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Postby TearHere » Sun Mar 09, 2008 5:39 am

Repentant Soul

The striking pain-
who's to blame?
This worldly creatures praise.

The precious tears
just run like hell
'Twas caused by the disgrace.

While some endure
their future secure,
You fall in disbelief
how yours gave way-
in a flutter destroyed
now you dwindle in dismay.

Ephemeral is the world,
Eternal is the faith-
It is but unfortunate
that you,creature,
realised it too late.
When all else fails..don't stop.
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Re: repentant soul

Postby Krisi » Sun Mar 09, 2008 10:17 am

TearHere wrote:Repentant Soul

The striking pain-
who's to blame?
This worldly creatures praise.

The precious tears
just run like hell
'Twas caused by the disgrace.

While some endure
their future secure,
You fall in disbelief
how yours gave way-
in a flutter destroyed
now you dwindle in dismay.

Ephemeral is the world,
Eternal is the faith-
It is but unfortunate
that you,creature,
realised it too late.


Nice TearHear! I like it. :)
Please go on writing...
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always.


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Re: repentant soul

Postby Sunnypk » Tue Mar 11, 2008 6:45 pm

u have written very nice dear
keep it up !

:)
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Re: repentant soul

Postby TearHere » Thu Mar 13, 2008 1:25 am

Krisi wrote:Nice TearHear! I like it. :)
Please go on writing...


Thanks alot!. :oops: :D ..

I wrote this last year.. I saw my notebook while i was cleaning up my old stuff a few weeks back..
I've got not enough time to write now.. i guess i'll have to spend more time in the bathroom again..hehe (i wrote this one on the throne!shh... weird I know, the writings i consider my best were written at my worst..) :mrgreen: :wink:
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Re: repentant soul

Postby TearHere » Thu Mar 13, 2008 1:27 am

Sunnypk wrote:u have written very nice dear
keep it up !

:)


thank you Sunnypk.. It's been a while since I wrote here in EC.. .. .. i miss it here........ :(
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Re: repentant soul

Postby Krisi » Thu Mar 13, 2008 2:04 am

TearHere wrote:
Krisi wrote:Nice TearHear! I like it. :)
Please go on writing...


Thanks alot!. :oops: :D ..

I wrote this last year.. I saw my notebook while i was cleaning up my old stuff a few weeks back..
I've got not enough time to write now.. i guess i'll have to spend more time in the bathroom again..hehe (i wrote this one on the throne!shh... weird I know, the writings i consider my best were written at my worst..) :mrgreen: :wink:



:shock: hahahahahahahahahahaha ..... :lol: :P :lol: :P :lol:
I can sense it here. :shock: .... so then, you can write more.... :lol: :lol: :lol:

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Re: repentant soul

Postby shakespear » Thu Mar 13, 2008 11:26 am

Good luck TearHere.
I think this poem is fantastic
our life is like a night mare
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Re: repentant soul

Postby Krisi » Mon Mar 17, 2008 3:52 am

TearHere,
Please write some more...
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Re: repentant soul

Postby TearHere » Tue Mar 18, 2008 4:25 am

Krisi wrote:TearHere,
Please write some more...


yes, I will.. Maybe in a week or two you'll see it here..
I can't tell.. sometimes i feel like writing sometimes I don't..
It just comes and goes..and I can't really just tell.. :lol:

Though it's so sweet of you to want to read some more of my writings.. I guess i can post some from last year's poems..thanks krisi.. :D
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Re: repentant soul

Postby Krisi » Tue Mar 18, 2008 8:19 am

TearHere wrote:
Krisi wrote:TearHere,
Please write some more...


yes, I will.. Maybe in a week or two you'll see it here..
I can't tell.. sometimes i feel like writing sometimes I don't..
It just comes and goes..and I can't really just tell.. :lol:

Though it's so sweet of you to want to read some more of my writings.. I guess i can post some from last year's poems..thanks krisi.. :D


I'll wait for it.
Thanks.
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