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Eve & Adam

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Eve & Adam

Postby shakespear » Wed Apr 30, 2008 7:21 am

Eve & Adam
It is me who one day knocked your door
And you are who meanwhile asked me to come in
And you are yourself who gave me the delicious apple
And tempted me to eat it
You are now asking me to go out
And warning me not to come close
to your palace.
Where is your promising hope?
Nothing can be seen on the horizon but mirage
Where are your promises?
Were they dust as foam?
Were they mere nonsense?
Don't you remember your words?
About love....
About kindness.....
About emotion.....
Now I know your falsity
But after it's too late
I roved all countries, holding my troubles
Which were parts of me
Part of my memories
I wanted to bury them
As a miserable one
Wanting to bury his killed brother
I held my troubles
As a traveller holding his bags
Aiming to reach behind boundaries
And he will not
our life is like a night mare
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Re: Eve & Adam

Postby sweets » Wed Apr 30, 2008 8:42 am

shakespear
now i feel that ur peot this time stands against women at all u consider them as the main reason of suffering in the worls since u use eve and adam story that we know it

but in general i like it
cheeeeeeeeers
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Re: Eve & Adam

Postby shakespear » Wed Apr 30, 2008 8:44 am

sweet u seem at computer at this moment and ur comment is important for me .
it`s not against women
our life is like a night mare
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Re: Eve & Adam

Postby sweets » Wed Apr 30, 2008 8:58 am

well ur peot this time i don't how to describ
let me think then write my cooment
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Re: Eve & Adam

Postby shakespear » Wed May 14, 2008 8:40 am

Hi sweet
U didn`t comment on my poem.
I think I`m in need to ur comment.
our life is like a night mare
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Re: Eve & Adam

Postby shakespear » Thu Aug 07, 2008 12:45 pm

shakespear wrote:Eve & Adam
It is me who one day knocked your door
And you are who meanwhile asked me to come in
And you are yourself who gave me the delicious apple
And tempted me to eat it
You are now asking me to go out
And warning me not to come close
to your palace.
Where is your promising hope?
Nothing can be seen on the horizon but mirage
Where are your promises?
Were they dust as foam?
Were they mere nonsense?
Don't you remember your words?
About love....
About kindness.....
About emotion.....
Now I know your falsity
But after it's too late
I roved all countries, holding my troubles
Which were parts of me
Part of my memories
I wanted to bury them
As a miserable one
Wanting to bury his killed brother
I held my troubles
As a traveller holding his bags
Aiming to reach behind boundaries
And he will not


this poem remindes me the sad times i have lived.
i like to remenber every seconds
good luck
our life is like a night mare
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Re: Eve & Adam

Postby shakespear » Sat Nov 22, 2008 11:04 am

hi everyone
our life is like a night mare
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Re: Eve & Adam

Postby farah » Sun Mar 01, 2009 9:56 am

there is sadness again in it.
u wanna make the woman behind ur sufferings, i.e a woman is the cause of the suffering.
nonsense
we have to live our life freely
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Re: Eve & Adam

Postby shakespear » Sat Oct 16, 2010 7:16 pm

sorry
i didn't see this comment
thnx
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Re: Eve & Adam

Postby manar » Tue Jan 04, 2011 11:39 am

hi shakespear
i am a new member here ,and each time i read a poem of u i like to post my replay about it ,
i hope u accept my comments,

what i wanna say is that u r a wonderful poet
ur words touch me

so,keep it up,
and i hope u accept me as a frind
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