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Hi dear friends
I want to share with you my second poem. Please feel free to comment.

Open your eyes
As the darkness begins to disappear
A new day has come
An old one has gone
Here you are
Opening your blessed eyes
Looking up into the sky
Thanking God for letting you survive
Let this new day be full of energy
Work help love and creativity
Let it be a turning point to the better

This is your new chance so forget about your past
You don't even know how much this chance will last

Think twice, think again
You are unique, it's not in vain
You are created to fit one of the circles of the chain
So others may benefit from you as you can get from them

You are different friend
That's a blessing from the God of this land
We need you friend, we need your works
Much more than your words

We need your smile that gives birth to a new hope
We don't want to see you sad, no
We know it has been so hard to be fine
But it's not harder than it was during our prophet's time.

i like it
it's sweet with universal theme i love that start so much"
As the darkness begins to disappear
A new day has come
An old one has gone"

keep on we are waiting for more

cheeeeeeeeeers

Thanks sweets
I'm glad you liked my poem.
I'll share more.
all the best.

and iam waiting for more

cheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeers

I like a lot ur poem,u r a very good writer,goodluck in future .