hello
i think u r right but i intended to do that and i was able to do alliteration
thnx 4 this comment and really u seem expert in literature
c u and have gd luck
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Hi I aske sweet about u and her but she didn't answer me and I think u can answer me please r u in love with her.? I am sorry about this question but I want to know I am not envy her .i shall wait for the answer .bye
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Hi I think its not ur affair in addition I'm here to hear comment on my poem not to hear that and I wish she loves me koz she is very education and has high spirit so if she loves me I'll swim in the sea at night in the winter and account the sand of the shore and drops of rains and leaves of trees so don't ask me about that again plz …..
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good responsshakespear wrote:Hi I think its not ur affair in addition I'm here to hear comment on my poem not to hear that and I wish she loves me koz she is very education and has high spirit so if she loves me I'll swim in the sea at night in the winter and account the sand of the shore and drops of rains and leaves of trees so don't ask me about that again plz …..
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sonnet (noun): a poem of fourteen lines using any of a number of formal rhyme schemes, in English typically having ten syllables per line
Well, it's 14 lines ok. And most have 10 syllables.
Well, it's 14 lines ok. And most have 10 syllables.
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thnx palyer 4 this msg but u did n't value my poem so plz send me ur comment about the poem
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thnx palyer 4 this msg but u did n't value my poem so plz send me ur comment about the poem
best wihes friend
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I think it's a very clever strange sonnet.
But if you intend it to be a sonnet - typically with 14 lines and typically 10 syllables per line (which seems to be what you do intend) - then I think you should try to fix the lines that don't have 10 syllables.
Just my humble opinion, since you ask me to value your sonnet
But if you intend it to be a sonnet - typically with 14 lines and typically 10 syllables per line (which seems to be what you do intend) - then I think you should try to fix the lines that don't have 10 syllables.
Just my humble opinion, since you ask me to value your sonnet
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hello
its typical as u said , the poem contains 14 linesand every line has 10 syllables .it is ab ab cd cd ef ef gg so plz show me what have i to do?
really u seem very good in poetry and i like to make use of ur information.
c u bye
its typical as u said , the poem contains 14 linesand every line has 10 syllables .it is ab ab cd cd ef ef gg so plz show me what have i to do?
really u seem very good in poetry and i like to make use of ur information.
c u bye
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hello lovely friends
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hello player
really i like to contact u and know from u something about poetry so plz let's meet
thanks and have nice moments
really i like to contact u and know from u something about poetry so plz let's meet
thanks and have nice moments
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Re: strange sonnet
it's a tongue twister :D
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it has meaning beside the tongue twister...ok
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Shakes this poem i need to read it again and again to got well its meaning
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hi
its hard to be pronounced
its hard to be pronounced
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I THINK IT'S NOT VERY GOODshakespear wrote:Strange sonnet
Don't depart O dear! Days are delightful dreams.
Let's live lovely life, lick lips lustfully.
Buy beauty beside bliss, buy big bright beams.
Sing so soft songs, "Siren" start songs slightly.
* * *
You're yap yearn to yoke, years yarn the yellow
Hey hobo here! Have ye heeded hind?
Fight foes for freedom, fall down for fellow.
Can't you come closely? Can't you keep kind?
* * *
My mass's much, Magian maid made me mad.
Tiny titmouse touched torn temper timely.
Save sick single, sinking in sins, still sad.
Rude rook raped roe, rain ran round road roughly.
Can you guess my poem either good or bad?
Don't be shy please! And show your opinion frankly.
ANY WAY, IT'S MY WORK
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