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A lot of him A little of me

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A lot of him A little of me

Postby virgo » Fri Sep 25, 2009 5:36 pm

In my broken mirror I was looking at me
A lot of tears were falling down on my cheek
A lot of sadness was appeared on my face
A lot of him and a little of me
That was what I've seen
So I tried to wipe away all of my tears
But I found only my dry skin
I tried to laugh out in a certain way
But I saw only his smile instead of mine
I tried to see my real me
But as I think it was too late
A lot of him and a little of me
All of that were appeared only there
That was the real me
But on the other side
I found a girl....a girl whom I know very well
A girl with a dry skin with no tears
That sadness was never appeared on her face
But she's still share it with me in her heart
and i still see a lot of him and a little of me
a little of me and a lot of him ~_~
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Re: A lot of him A little of me

Postby manel » Sat Sep 26, 2009 5:09 pm

oh my friend i'm so impressed by your poem.it's pure and charmful .i send u my greeting .go ahead .never give up coz though i'm still a student of english but i can say that you're talented.cu.
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Re: A lot of him A little of me

Postby Mohyiedine » Wed Sep 30, 2009 8:25 pm

Hi friend, i saw in this poeme strang energy Coz the method of writting is special as well as idea that you are talking in, i feel it's alittle bit unclearly and the message which you wanna send, it's hardly for understanding, in other hand, i found it sensitive without doubt, because it's talking about your suffering, then you gave wonderful comparison ......
I hope, you improve your sort of writting more and more, Because i see you good poet in the future but that associates with your efforts^___^.
Go ahead friend!!!
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