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And then they die

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And then they die

Postby shokin » Sun Oct 18, 2009 12:26 pm

A poem of me, which sounds differently from my preceeding ones.



And then they die



And they meet each other,
And they say each to other,
- Not today...
- Just today...

And the next night is right,
And the next light might fight,
- Just a fast sight...
- Just a last sight...

And the next day they play,
And the next day they say,
- Just two days...
- Just two days...

And then they live together,
And then they say each to other,
- Just too...
- Too just...



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Re: And then they die

Postby Vega » Tue Oct 20, 2009 7:18 am

Good job!


If you don't mind, let me amend something:

shokin wrote:A poem of mine (me :nok: ), which sounds differently from my preceeding ones.
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Re: And then they die

Postby shokin » Tue Oct 20, 2009 10:20 am

Thanks for the correction ! Now I can see another difference between english and french. :mrgreen:

I don't mind. I do mind if you don't correct me. {-;



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Re: And then they die

Postby sweets » Wed Oct 28, 2009 9:07 am

i do not know what to say i like it and dislike it sametime

u depend on sound too much remindind me with 18th poets if u remember them {-:
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