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can you understand me?

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can you understand me?

Postby shakespear » Tue Sep 07, 2010 10:37 am

Can you understand me

Oh my sweet dream! You’re better than reality
There are no words can express my deep feeling
For your sake, I lost my kin, left my city
All blamed me loving you, how can one quit healing
Can I live without you? I need your pity
Oh love! Stay with me! You have good dealing
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On those soft hillocks, I put my tired head
Relaxed, I slept for ever, I got a nice dream
The high sneer’s voice woke me” Bad omen” he said
“Jupiter’s angry, you should leave your hope beam”
If Jupiter see her, he’ll fall ill in bed
Don’t blame me! On chest I hold my seam
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Oh my God! I wish I were her mirror
So I can look at her face every time
I wish I were her comb, in hair no horror
I wish I were her ground, touch me her prime
The dervish left his den to be her adorer
You’re my hope, my pleasure, you made me write rhyme
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Can you understand me and my love-words?
So you should try love again and again like birds
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sometimes, the reality is better than all sweet dreams but often we can't find this chance so we have dreams to escape from our bitter reality.
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Re: can you understand me?

Postby sweets » Tue Sep 07, 2010 6:09 pm

goodevening
my freind shakespear
u alaways impress me and members here with ur writes ,u named urself shakespear and u really desreve this name

this time ur poem named (can u understand me ) but this time i'm sorry koz i can not understand the love u talk about that fake rare love maybe i did not live in such loving mood


i hope to understand the LOVE ur talking about just for once in my life

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Re: can you understand me?

Postby shakespear » Tue Sep 07, 2010 7:30 pm

hello
real love and false love are inside our hearts
if u love really u'll feel that ur sweetheart with u in anywhere at anytime.....
in ur dreams, in ur work, in ur play , in ur sadness and in ur happiness....
be destroyed but don't defeated as in the novel " the man and the sea" koz if u stop that means
u reach death.
read my words and think closely u'll find i'm right
thnx
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Re: can you understand me?

Postby sweets » Tue Sep 07, 2010 7:56 pm

i read ur comment

real love and false love are inside our hearts
ur right in that we make love true or not but how we find that love ???
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Re: can you understand me?

Postby shakespear » Tue Sep 07, 2010 8:22 pm

ok
people still with us and keep the real love those who deserve our love
but the other who leave us quickly we thank god they left us koz they don't deserve our love
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Re: can you understand me?

Postby sweets » Thu Sep 09, 2010 10:35 am

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Re: can you understand me?

Postby shakespear » Thu Sep 09, 2010 1:30 pm

hello
no comment
what does this mean?
really i didn't know ur agree or not
so plz say ur view even u opposite me koz i always respect ur idea and view
thnx and cu
have nice ead
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Re: can you understand me?

Postby sweets » Fri Sep 10, 2010 4:36 pm

no comment on the poem but itold u i do not think that there is true love in this world maybe there is but not in my world

that my view opint
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Re: can you understand me?

Postby shakespear » Sat Sep 11, 2010 4:25 pm

hello
thnx
really i'd like to advise u and advise my self that we've to take off our black- glasses may be we see the world in different look, may be we see it in colourful look....
don't look at empty half of the glass but look at the full half of it
u'll say u r more pessimistic than me, i say yes but the reality we have to change our mind, our look to the world round us, don't u agree with me?
take care
thnx
c u
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Re: can you understand me?

Postby sweets » Sat Sep 11, 2010 6:09 pm

well thanx for ur advise and i'll try ur advice maybe it's works oneday
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