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you're poor

Postby shakespear » Tue Dec 07, 2010 3:05 pm

You’re poor

As you’re a poor man, you can’t like or hate
A human third rank, you’re less than a dog
She ignores you, insults you, it’s you’re fate….
To be poor and your ways are full of fog
She cares for her dog, who cares if you’re late?
Who cares if you’re alive or died in a bog?
Sleep or not; well or ill… it’s same in rate
She won’t come although you will , long time, wait
* * *
Day after day, their money will increase
And your troubles with poverty increase too
You want peace and love, you often whisper please
They don’t care for peace, they always yell boo
You like to see her? You may her dog tease
Don’t you see your sky cloudy? But theirs blue
In winter you suffer from cold and freeze
But warmed, she grumbles from honey of bees
* * *
If you sicken, you won’t find helping hand
None holds you, in your chest all will stab sword
And if you die, they’ll insert you in sand
None puts rose on your grave, by all you’re gored
You’d lived alone without beloved or band
It’s your sad fate, it’s the will of your lord
Now you’re without grave stone, you’re lost in land
Like all beings you died, but you’ll still be grand
* * *
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Re: you're poor

Postby sweets » Fri Dec 10, 2010 3:02 pm

hi
finally u post it
i'm so happy to read any thing u write at least to know that ur ok

takecare
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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Mon Dec 13, 2010 7:07 pm

hi
thnx 4 ur msg but i need to hear ur comment about this poem ...is it good? is it bad? plz say any thing just show me ur point of view..
nice 2 hear about u and 2 know u r alive
c u and have good moments
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Re: you're poor

Postby Aimee » Wed Dec 29, 2010 12:00 pm

Hello shakespear,

Hope you are fine.
I am really impressed friend.
Every word in your poem speaks...

But i need some clarification. Please don't mistake me. Shall I ask?

Waiting to hear from you.

Regards,
Aimee.
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Re: you're poor

Postby manar » Mon Jan 03, 2011 9:19 pm

Hello shakespeare,

i very much liked ur soft feelings and i really wish u all the best.

a request i wanna ask,

that i want to send my creative writing to be shared but i dont no how to do it in this
website i hope to tell me how ?
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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Tue Feb 01, 2011 9:12 pm

first i'm so sorry koz i wasn't here
thnx all of u ... my friend aimee thank u very much about ur friendly words and u can ask me whatever u like
and thank u manar for ur lovely comment and u can post ur writings by pressing on nwtopic and then u can send wt ever u want if u had registered in this club
at last i like to thank my close friend sweet 4 her comments and caring 4 me
good luck
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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Fri Feb 04, 2011 9:14 pm

manar wrote:Hello shakespeare,

i very much liked ur soft feelings and i really wish u all the best.

a request i wanna ask,

that i want to send my creative writing to be shared but i dont no how to do it in this
website i hope to tell me how ?


i told u how to send ur writings and i don't know if u succeed or not
plz tell me
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Re: you're poor

Postby xtragirl » Wed May 11, 2011 3:14 pm

Hi,

Finally I can join this and send you some comment. Well.. After I read this, I think it's good. From up to bottom you have nice word and it's easy to think. Even I don't really good to send you some comment.
Good job..
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Re: you're poor

Postby shakespear » Thu May 12, 2011 8:19 am

thnx and welcome
our new friend
thnx again 4 this comment and plz keep contact and i think u r not bad in english
good luck
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Re: you're poor

Postby sweethuman » Tue May 17, 2011 4:43 am

Thanks for shakespear
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