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A strange place!

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A strange place!

Postby manar » Fri Jan 07, 2011 8:45 am

A strange place i was in,
it was dark and desolate,
many noisy sounds were blowing,
thunder roared with lightening,
solely i retiredr there,
under a tree with a wild skin,
it was bad,it was horrible,it was really frightening,
suddenly,i glanced Him,
He was calm with peacefulness,
He gave me a silver box with golden beads,shining,
"to be here,you need this",He was telling,
i opend it,"Faithfulness" was glittering,
as He wanted to leave,i asked Him,
"what a terrible wood am i in?"
He nicely smiled as He was answering,"it is the life you are in"
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Re: A strange place!

Postby shakespear » Fri Feb 04, 2011 5:31 pm

hello
i think u have good idea and the topic is very interesting
ur poem is like a story, it has attraction to tell the reader what is the end
congratulations
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Re: A strange place!

Postby manal » Fri Feb 04, 2011 6:56 pm

woooooooooooooooooooooooowooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo,
i was in my way to give up with this poem,and today i recieve a nice comment and whom from ?it is the master shakespear ?????????
how lucky i am :-D
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Re: A strange place!

Postby shakespear » Wed Feb 09, 2011 4:16 pm

hello
thnx but really i don't deserve this praise and i hope we can meet
but really u have lovely words
have nice moments
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