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i need u to draw the smile on my lips,
i need u to sow the shine in my eyes,
i need u to stamp the hope in my heart,
i need u to indicate the happiness to my world.

i need u to design my dreams with ur tender words,
i need u to sing to me with ur soft soul,
i need u to dance with me with ur gentle emotions,
i need u to embrace me with ur noble thoughts.

I NEED U TO MAKE ME THAT PERSON U HAVE CREATED FROM ME.

hi manar
nice odde full of wonderful emontins

keep on

hello sweets,
thanx for ur kind encouragement

ur welcome

hello
as sweet said u have lovely words and feelings but i think ur poem needs to keep rhyme i meant the last words of the line must keep the same vowels and consonants. i think u understand me in arabic we call it (qafeya)
gd lk and have lovely moments

hello shakespear,and thanks alot for ur nice comment.
in fact i need alot of time to learn how to write a successful poem in english,it is my first attempts to do it ,i am not a poet yet all what i do is that i am tring to write what is passing in my mind in order to develope my english.
thanks again for ur sweet words.

hello
u r welcome and i'll be happy to help u in writing poem and to be good poetess .
really u have lovely ideas and topics so u don't need much to be the best poetess in our club
have good times
my regards

thank u shakespeare ,i am really lucky to have a teacher and friend like u
ur words encourege me a lot .

hello friend
u r always welcome and just ask me u'll fine me close to help u in any time and in any thing u want
have nice moments