u come back and we, ur friends all of us, r happy for ur coming back and we hope u show us lovely and new poems which always u used to show us...
in this poem u took a figure of man as i did in the my poem and i think we exchanged the roles ...i don't know but i think i'm feel pleased to play the role of woman and feel how the woman feels ...
sweets wrote:You only didn't me watch well
i think u'd better say: You only didn't watch me well
another thing :u got the subject befor the auxiliary read the following:
sweets wrote:How you could not note that ????
you needn;t do that and u can easily put the aux b4 the subject
another thing: u put preposition b4 adjective and this is wrong koz "careless" not noun its adjective...u have to use "carelessness" read the following:
sweets wrote:But with your careless ..sure it'll do that
any way ur poem is a reply to my poem and u inspired me to write another one in the same style ..u encouraged me
ur poem is full of valuable words which have deep meanings and i hope i read anothre poem like this lovely poem
congratulations twice for ur coming back and for this poem
have nice moments