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BETWEEN ME & HER

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BETWEEN ME & HER

Postby shakespear » Thu Dec 15, 2011 6:11 am

BETWEEN ME AND HER

I:
I always think I can leave
But I didn’t try it before
You're my candle, now I believe
Without you, my heart is sore
**********************
She:
I'm your candle, I burn my prime
Just to light your so dark way
But I know from the first time
I need you 'nd can't stay away
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I:
Don’t hate me I can't bear it
I know your heart's often sad
For me, I think you're so fit
You're an angel, but I'm bad
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She:
in my heart, you stabbed your knife
On my back, is still its bunch
I hate you but I'll hate life
And my heart bleeds so much
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I:
I'm Punic, you're queen Didon
In my heart, you had a throne
And all things sweet you'd done
Don’t leave me in world alone
But you, I have got no one
In my life, the sun's shone
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She:
I loved you but I was late
Its wrong, I'm not your queen
You enslaved me in last date
I love you and I've no bean
I'm sure you're my lovely fate
I try to hide but its seen
**********************

at last i could finish it...alhamdulilah that i finished it koz i was suffering ...have nice moments
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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Postby sweets » Thu Dec 15, 2011 6:42 pm

dear friend
I'm so happy that you finished it you're better than me i did not finish till now .......


i like your conversation so much but i did not find the end is it endless story????????? tell me plz.

i'll send m poetic comment sooooon

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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Postby shakespear » Thu Dec 15, 2011 11:40 pm

hi friend
i couldn't add more koz i hoped to finish it in any way so its not short although its end not witty but it's ok...thnx 4 ur comment and i hope u finish ur poem soon...
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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Postby sweets » Fri Dec 16, 2011 6:15 pm

honestly

i lose my talent ...... i feel so bad
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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Postby shakespear » Fri Dec 16, 2011 10:58 pm

sweets wrote:honestly

i lose my talent ...... i feel so bad


i don't think so u r like spring and it won't be dry and will still flow with clear water and u said this term b4 but u wrote many after that so don't be despaired koz all of us live in languor like urs but we passed it and u was one of us and u passed it b4 so hurry and hold ur pen and write whatever u get in ur mind.....i hope u can do it koz u r one of the motives, impulses in this club...
my best wishes...
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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Postby Lara » Fri Dec 16, 2011 11:08 pm

Hello Shakes, it's nice to see a different poem :-D

shakespear wrote:I loved you but I was late
Its wrong, I'm not your queen
You enslaved me in last date
I love you and I've no bean
I'm sure you're my lovely fate
I try to hide but its seen


Well we cant hide love we feel to the otherone, but it seems the time they met wasnt the right one, they love each other, but cant be together, it's my impression, am i right? :roll:
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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Postby shakespear » Fri Dec 16, 2011 11:55 pm

shakespear wrote:She:
I'm your candle, I burn my prime
Just to light your so dark way
But I know from the first time
I need you 'nd can't stay away



i think she is more loyal than him ...she is ready to fall down for his sake although he loyal too but she is more...
and as u said
Lara wrote:it seems the time they met wasnt the right one, they love each other, but cant be together


i think u r r8 and u r excellent in this comment...i like this impression
thnx and go ahead and let us hear sth from u...
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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Postby Lara » Sat Dec 17, 2011 12:26 am

Thanks Shakes
I hope so :-D
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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Postby shakespear » Sat Dec 17, 2011 1:21 am

u r welcome friend...
have nice time
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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER

Postby sweets » Sat Dec 17, 2011 7:22 am

shakespear wrote:
sweets wrote:honestly

i lose my talent ...... i feel so bad


i don't think so u r like spring and it won't be dry and will still flow with clear water and u said this term b4 but u wrote many after that so don't be despaired koz all of us live in languor like urs but we passed it and u was one of us and u passed it b4 so hurry and hold ur pen and write whatever u get in ur mind.....i hope u can do it koz u r one of the motives, impulses in this club...
my best wishes...


thanx for cheering up friend but when heart is lost ..when mind is busy..when soul is missed when you feel that time is running and you can not catch it how can i hold my pen again ??!!!!
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