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broken mirror

Posted: Sat Dec 24, 2011 6:25 am
by sweets
(Shakespeare always asks me to hold a pen as first step .....so this is what i got)

what to say ..what to write ..what to tell ...

i lose the whole sense !!!!! sense of life ...time ...passion

people say I'm cold like ice how can i deny!!! but they do not know why ...
just wanna talk talk and talk......just talk

my soul is like broken mirror how to collect...my heart is broken how to mend ...my body is tired how o rest............

they are here just to watch without support no one mend or even try to collect they just wanna the end ......... waiting that ice to melt and catch the gift !!!!

who I'm i asked myself once ???? am i a butterfly flying next light waiting to die or like a tree in storm refusing the death??????


who I'm ???am i that passion lover who ready to give everything??? or playful one who likes to hurt all burn all likes revenge??????????


what to say...what to tell.......

I live puzzle and can't find the end !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Sun Dec 25, 2011 3:41 am
by shakespear
hi
although ur writing is prose, not metrical, but i think it touches the heart and it so nice....it enters the hearts without asking permission koz it flows from inside ur heart.....i can't say anything more koz i have no words to come close to ur great expressions and ur fantastic words........if u just say the title .......i think it's enough to be a good work.......so i think u have the ability to write great writing easily.....
my regards....

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Sun Dec 25, 2011 6:19 am
by sweets
so no grammatical mistakes !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! hoooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrry

happy that u like it

have a sweet day

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Mon Dec 26, 2011 4:29 am
by shakespear
طبع الكرى فوق الجفون ذبولا فاراك منها صارما مسلولا
تهوى الوصال وقد تريك تمنعا فاسلك لقلب الفاتنات سبيلا
ان الهوى صعب وان مارسته مارست فيه الضم والتقبيلا
its in arabic and i know u'll understand it.....thnx

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Mon Dec 26, 2011 7:02 am
by sweets
no comment and i'm sure u know why

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Mon Jan 30, 2012 8:59 pm
by shakespear
hello........
i don't know
i tried to understand my self but i think its so hard so how can i understand the ppl round me...its more diffuclt
broken mirror...represents our tired souls which can't reflect wt we face in this world
i d k

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Thu Apr 09, 2015 6:20 am
by momalanmol
what can i say only you are very good , frankly you are playing by words readily, and the best thing i like in this poem rich vocabulary , i was useful about it and i have found stiffness to understand this poem Coz you put difficult words for me, but that good to give me ability to improve my english and try to develop it.
i'll say it agian it's wonderful poem and i hope to you all best and all wishes.

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Sun Apr 19, 2015 10:06 am
by dreamer
thanx momalanmol

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Thu Dec 24, 2015 1:13 pm
by shakespear
broken mirror has a touch to souls....so it's large title...if one can make good poem about this title...

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2015 5:12 pm
by dreamer
i'll try

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Tue Dec 29, 2015 5:40 pm
by shakespear
where's the fragrant of that lovely flower...is it lost??? where are the fragments of your soul? where's the fatigue of your body? where's the fractions or your mirror?? can't all these things give you inspiration to write millions or lines....can't????

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Wed Dec 30, 2015 7:39 pm
by dreamer
i can't i'm frozen for long long long time

Re: broken mirror

Posted: Thu Dec 31, 2015 6:07 pm
by shakespear
i know wt r u talking about so i'm not amazed....koz i'm like u, have frozen soul...maybe have dying soul....smtimes i feel afraid when i about to catch the pencil or hold it to write poem...but at least u can try hoping u'll give us inspiration....
this site was so crowded with readers and writers but now....better to be silent...
let's read again..
i'm waiting