A ROSE & A HELL

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed Apr 09, 2014 11:40 am

hi friend
i also like the last stanza...it's about emotion...we can't live without emotion...
thnx 4 ur comment...i want to read sth from u..i think u r able to write a poem if u try...we can help each other...
thnx again

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Thu Apr 10, 2014 4:15 pm

i'm expecting better poem next time i mean that

you can start with this line

if i were you and u were me
waiting for ur line

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Sat Apr 12, 2014 12:22 pm

hello
ok ur line starts as the following:
if i were u and u were me
i use ur eyes, by my eyes u'll see
i touch ur chest feeling ur heart's beat
when i look to my face our eyes meet

complete plz...........................

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Sat Apr 12, 2014 2:27 pm

if i were u and u were me

u'll see how i feel
without u how can i feel
ur my half even if we won't meet

ur trun

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Mon Apr 14, 2014 10:55 am

If i were u and u were me
u would know and u would see
how pain'd hurt my soft soul
u will still my lofty goal
if i were u, i'd kiss my hand
if u were me, u'd get my land

ur turn

farah · Post by **farah** » Mon Apr 14, 2014 3:32 pm

Hi
you and Dreamrer will have a good porm, but:
Whose this poem will be? You or Dreamer?
No fight, ok?

:-P:-D
SEE YOU

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 5:26 am

if i were u and u were me
u would know how pain i could cause
so staying away is better for u

if i were u and u were me
u would know powerful i'm i
how i can break hearts easily with no lose ,,

if i were u and u were me
u'll see that staying away from u is mercy from me

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:10 am

Hi farah.
We won't argue about the poem
thnx 4 ur comment

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 7:59 pm

If I were you, and you were me
We'd live special life and we'd be
Happy creatures and we could see
Pretty sky and so pretty sea
........
If I were you, I'd nurse myself
That I still think by my real brain
I'd take me far from any elf
To my lover's chest, in a lane
..........
If you were me, you'd live torture
That I loved you or I loved me
I you, you me, we're sole creature
Am I your slave? Or we are free?
.........
If you were me, you'd have desire
You'd sense and feel my hot passion
You'd sense heat inside me and fire
If you were me, I'd get my ration
.........
ur turn

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 8:11 pm

if i were you and u were me
u'll feel what i live
heart says yes .. mind says no
if u were me u'll live in big trouble

if i were i would wake up
and have new love with new dream
no need to live past no need to cry
no need to wake past ..
let it pass

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 8:29 pm

hi
icant go on kox now my heart feels sad...y i feel ur tears rising in ur eyes, r they?
y i cause sadness 2 u & 2 myslf...u won in the poem....i wana u win....koz i u & u me , its mess

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 8:38 pm

it's not a battle to have winner in

i just wanna re-live my talent as we were remmber shaki?? those sweet mad days

sorry if i hurt u but as u said iu & u me

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 9:43 pm

Is it hard 2 find kind heart now a days? 4 me its not koz i hv my dearest & u kno that

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 10:33 pm

it's not hard to find one but the hard is to search well and ur too lazy to do that search

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 10:42 pm

God granted me so sweet , educated ..sweets & that's enough.

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 10:45 pm

don't make her shy that little girl is vanishing

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:04 pm

If she vanishing, im vanishing 2.... U kno, she's full of sweets

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:06 pm

sweetness is'nt work nowaday the curle is winner at this time

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:22 pm

Sweets may be an adjective or a name, u got it?

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:26 pm

cu around busy man
and think of new line to start our game

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:31 pm

I use mobile with hacking so its weak...nothing make me busy on u

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:37 pm

u become hacker tooo!!!!!!!!!

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue Apr 15, 2014 11:44 pm

Just 2 get net...noth else

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 7:41 am

start with this word:
when....
when can my cheek lay on ur cheek?
when can my lips touch ur lips?
when can my hand confound in ur hair?
comb it and temper ur neck?
is it possible or it's no way?

ur turn

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 2:50 pm

when sun meet moon
when we meet
i'm in to u

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 4:32 pm

when can i meet u, and look into ur eyes?
when can i take u, and take u to my chest?
when can my chest touch urs? feel ur heat?
when my hopes come true and live in ur paradise?
million " when" but none can be fact...

ur turn

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 6:04 pm

when millions be true
when all starts be 4 u
when i can say i luv u?

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 6:31 pm

when will the bright star visit me?
when will my lover mercy my heart?
when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?

ur turn

farah · Post by **farah** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 9:25 pm

shakespear wrote:when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?

I like these two lines. What did you mean with these two lines??
Please check your inbox.
I am waiting.
Good night.

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Wed Apr 16, 2014 9:49 pm

mmm ok listen;
florid tree refers to fortile female, when delicious fruit refers to sin or refers to forbidden fruit of Adam in paradise...when he eats that fruit feels of his nakedness..i think u know the tale...
thnx 4 ur comment and i'll check my inbox..
gd nyt

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:30 am

when i be u
when smiles be true
and life combain us too

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:58 am

i think it's " combine" my teacher...don't worry i got it...
my role:
when do you sweep my sad tear?
when do you make me happy?
when do remove my fear?
and catch my as all roads slippy?

good morning all my friends

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:41 pm

when be toghter
and life leave us for ever
i'll hold ur tear and draw your smile

when sun hugs moon
and starts say ture
i'll chase u

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 8:42 pm

i'm ur sun, ur my moon
when can i meet u in fact
i'll fold earth and get u soon
and we'll make our pact
............
urs

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:06 pm

come my sun and shine my days
i'm waiting for long nights
come and let me have new page

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:18 pm

i'll break through ur room's wall
cuddle u to heal my thirsty
and jade ur perfume, my doll
to find out my love busty

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:31 pm

no more u win this time

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:43 pm

in all cases u win
u inspire me to sin
u teach me to defies all
u teach me to be tall
to go up and catch the sky
to have wings and fly

thnx

farah · Post by **farah** » Fri Apr 18, 2014 4:26 pm

Hello my friend:
I want write poem please help me and corect the wrong.
When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?

Thanks. I wait your coment.

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Sat Apr 19, 2014 12:51 pm

farah wrote:When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?

hello farah:
first of all i wana apologize koz i'm late but at last i'm here now; some mistakes as i think:
reech= reach and there're some grammar mistakes so i'll write ur lines as i think the correct:
when can i reach my aim? or : when shall i reach my aim?
when i won't feel the same?
when will i get no blame?

really u wrote so lovely lines, you needed just some correction but at all you could say sth expressing.
i look forward to read more from you
have nice moments.

farah · Post by **farah** » Sun Apr 27, 2014 12:22 pm

hello shakespear...i want to thank you very much because you review my lines and finally i could issue these lines....thank you because you did me this favor..my lines:

you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...

i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Mon Apr 28, 2014 10:57 am

Hi farah.... U r welcome
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines

farah · Post by **farah** » Fri May 02, 2014 8:37 pm

shakespear wrote:Go ahead & lets read ur other lines

really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem
THANKS LOTS SHAKESPEAR
SEE YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOON

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Fri May 02, 2014 9:04 pm

farah wrote:really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem

ok listen farah...we start days b4 a game to start with a word or a line which determine the topic and we begin to compose about it...and u can review the comments i with dreamer...i think u r online now...so y don't u start with :
do i only feel sad ?
have nice moments...

farah · Post by **farah** » Fri May 02, 2014 9:43 pm

shakespear wrote:do i only feel sad ?

mmm ok so you want me to start with this line, right???
ok let me start:
Do I only feel sad?
Or all the world with me?
Are you also sad?
If not, you are bad.

hahahah... so what do you think about this poem??
I think it's so lovely game
I'm waiting your comment............

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Sat May 03, 2014 2:33 pm

Sorry net was cut... Really i think u start writing lines ...u can complete it with many lines but be careful with grammar& dictation& meaning

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Mon May 05, 2014 8:19 am

if ur online just start ur lines

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Mon May 05, 2014 9:16 am

Wt u wana me start with? Choose any thing.. U know my ability.. Ok?

dreamer · Post by **dreamer** » Tue May 06, 2014 11:55 am

i mean let's play our game

shakespear · Post by **shakespear** » Tue May 06, 2014 12:42 pm

Ok.... But really if u try a poem it'll be better... Ok :
Will you really go far away?