A ROSE & A HELL
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
hi friend
i also like the last stanza...it's about emotion...we can't live without emotion...
thnx 4 ur comment...i want to read sth from u..i think u r able to write a poem if u try...we can help each other...
thnx again
i also like the last stanza...it's about emotion...we can't live without emotion...
thnx 4 ur comment...i want to read sth from u..i think u r able to write a poem if u try...we can help each other...
thnx again
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
i'm expecting better poem next time i mean that
you can start with this line
if i were you and u were me
waiting for ur line
you can start with this line
if i were you and u were me
waiting for ur line
be urself
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
hello
ok ur line starts as the following:
if i were u and u were me
i use ur eyes, by my eyes u'll see
i touch ur chest feeling ur heart's beat
when i look to my face our eyes meet
complete plz...........................
ok ur line starts as the following:
if i were u and u were me
i use ur eyes, by my eyes u'll see
i touch ur chest feeling ur heart's beat
when i look to my face our eyes meet
complete plz...........................
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
if i were u and u were me
u'll see how i feel
without u how can i feel
ur my half even if we won't meet
ur trun
u'll see how i feel
without u how can i feel
ur my half even if we won't meet
ur trun
be urself
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
If i were u and u were me
u would know and u would see
how pain'd hurt my soft soul
u will still my lofty goal
if i were u, i'd kiss my hand
if u were me, u'd get my land
ur turn
u would know and u would see
how pain'd hurt my soft soul
u will still my lofty goal
if i were u, i'd kiss my hand
if u were me, u'd get my land
ur turn
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
Hi
you and Dreamrer will have a good porm, but:
Whose this poem will be? You or Dreamer?
No fight, ok?
:-P:-D
SEE YOU
you and Dreamrer will have a good porm, but:
Whose this poem will be? You or Dreamer?
No fight, ok?
:-P:-D
SEE YOU
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
if i were u and u were me
u would know how pain i could cause
so staying away is better for u
if i were u and u were me
u would know powerful i'm i
how i can break hearts easily with no lose ,,
if i were u and u were me
u'll see that staying away from u is mercy from me
u would know how pain i could cause
so staying away is better for u
if i were u and u were me
u would know powerful i'm i
how i can break hearts easily with no lose ,,
if i were u and u were me
u'll see that staying away from u is mercy from me
be urself
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Hi farah.
We won't argue about the poem
thnx 4 ur comment
We won't argue about the poem
thnx 4 ur comment
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If I were you, and you were me
We'd live special life and we'd be
Happy creatures and we could see
Pretty sky and so pretty sea
........
If I were you, I'd nurse myself
That I still think by my real brain
I'd take me far from any elf
To my lover's chest, in a lane
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If you were me, you'd live torture
That I loved you or I loved me
I you, you me, we're sole creature
Am I your slave? Or we are free?
.........
If you were me, you'd have desire
You'd sense and feel my hot passion
You'd sense heat inside me and fire
If you were me, I'd get my ration
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ur turn
We'd live special life and we'd be
Happy creatures and we could see
Pretty sky and so pretty sea
........
If I were you, I'd nurse myself
That I still think by my real brain
I'd take me far from any elf
To my lover's chest, in a lane
..........
If you were me, you'd live torture
That I loved you or I loved me
I you, you me, we're sole creature
Am I your slave? Or we are free?
.........
If you were me, you'd have desire
You'd sense and feel my hot passion
You'd sense heat inside me and fire
If you were me, I'd get my ration
.........
ur turn
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if i were you and u were me
u'll feel what i live
heart says yes .. mind says no
if u were me u'll live in big trouble
if i were i would wake up
and have new love with new dream
no need to live past no need to cry
no need to wake past ..
let it pass
u'll feel what i live
heart says yes .. mind says no
if u were me u'll live in big trouble
if i were i would wake up
and have new love with new dream
no need to live past no need to cry
no need to wake past ..
let it pass
be urself
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hi
icant go on kox now my heart feels sad...y i feel ur tears rising in ur eyes, r they?
y i cause sadness 2 u & 2 myslf...u won in the poem....i wana u win....koz i u & u me , its mess
icant go on kox now my heart feels sad...y i feel ur tears rising in ur eyes, r they?
y i cause sadness 2 u & 2 myslf...u won in the poem....i wana u win....koz i u & u me , its mess
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it's not a battle to have winner in
i just wanna re-live my talent as we were remmber shaki?? those sweet mad days
sorry if i hurt u but as u said iu & u me
i just wanna re-live my talent as we were remmber shaki?? those sweet mad days
sorry if i hurt u but as u said iu & u me
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Is it hard 2 find kind heart now a days? 4 me its not koz i hv my dearest & u kno that
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it's not hard to find one but the hard is to search well and ur too lazy to do that search
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God granted me so sweet , educated ..sweets & that's enough.
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If she vanishing, im vanishing 2.... U kno, she's full of sweets
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I use mobile with hacking so its weak...nothing make me busy on u
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
start with this word:
when....
when can my cheek lay on ur cheek?
when can my lips touch ur lips?
when can my hand confound in ur hair?
comb it and temper ur neck?
is it possible or it's no way?
ur turn
when....
when can my cheek lay on ur cheek?
when can my lips touch ur lips?
when can my hand confound in ur hair?
comb it and temper ur neck?
is it possible or it's no way?
ur turn
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when can i meet u, and look into ur eyes?
when can i take u, and take u to my chest?
when can my chest touch urs? feel ur heat?
when my hopes come true and live in ur paradise?
million " when" but none can be fact...
ur turn
when can i take u, and take u to my chest?
when can my chest touch urs? feel ur heat?
when my hopes come true and live in ur paradise?
million " when" but none can be fact...
ur turn
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when will the bright star visit me?
when will my lover mercy my heart?
when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?
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when will my lover mercy my heart?
when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?
ur turn
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I like these two lines. What did you mean with these two lines??shakespear wrote:when will i climb that florid tree?
and my mouth suck delicious fruit?
Please check your inbox.
I am waiting.
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mmm ok listen;
florid tree refers to fortile female, when delicious fruit refers to sin or refers to forbidden fruit of Adam in paradise...when he eats that fruit feels of his nakedness..i think u know the tale...
thnx 4 ur comment and i'll check my inbox..
gd nyt
florid tree refers to fortile female, when delicious fruit refers to sin or refers to forbidden fruit of Adam in paradise...when he eats that fruit feels of his nakedness..i think u know the tale...
thnx 4 ur comment and i'll check my inbox..
gd nyt
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i think it's " combine" my teacher...don't worry i got it...
my role:
when do you sweep my sad tear?
when do you make me happy?
when do remove my fear?
and catch my as all roads slippy?
good morning all my friends
my role:
when do you sweep my sad tear?
when do you make me happy?
when do remove my fear?
and catch my as all roads slippy?
good morning all my friends
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
when be toghter
and life leave us for ever
i'll hold ur tear and draw your smile
when sun hugs moon
and starts say ture
i'll chase u
and life leave us for ever
i'll hold ur tear and draw your smile
when sun hugs moon
and starts say ture
i'll chase u
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i'm ur sun, ur my moon
when can i meet u in fact
i'll fold earth and get u soon
and we'll make our pact
............
urs
when can i meet u in fact
i'll fold earth and get u soon
and we'll make our pact
............
urs
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
come my sun and shine my days
i'm waiting for long nights
come and let me have new page
i'm waiting for long nights
come and let me have new page
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
i'll break through ur room's wall
cuddle u to heal my thirsty
and jade ur perfume, my doll
to find out my love busty
cuddle u to heal my thirsty
and jade ur perfume, my doll
to find out my love busty
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
in all cases u win
u inspire me to sin
u teach me to defies all
u teach me to be tall
to go up and catch the sky
to have wings and fly
thnx
u inspire me to sin
u teach me to defies all
u teach me to be tall
to go up and catch the sky
to have wings and fly
thnx
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
Hello my friend:
I want write poem please help me and corect the wrong.
When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?
Thanks. I wait your coment.
I want write poem please help me and corect the wrong.
When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?
Thanks. I wait your coment.
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
hello farah:farah wrote:When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?
first of all i wana apologize koz i'm late but at last i'm here now; some mistakes as i think:
reech= reach and there're some grammar mistakes so i'll write ur lines as i think the correct:
when can i reach my aim? or : when shall i reach my aim?
when i won't feel the same?
when will i get no blame?
really u wrote so lovely lines, you needed just some correction but at all you could say sth expressing.
i look forward to read more from you
have nice moments.
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hello shakespear...i want to thank you very much because you review my lines and finally i could issue these lines....thank you because you did me this favor..my lines:
you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...
i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..
you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...
i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..
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Hi farah.... U r welcome
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
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really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poemshakespear wrote:Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
THANKS LOTS SHAKESPEAR
SEE YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOON
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ok listen farah...we start days b4 a game to start with a word or a line which determine the topic and we begin to compose about it...and u can review the comments i with dreamer...i think u r online now...so y don't u start with :farah wrote:really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem
do i only feel sad ?
have nice moments...
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mmm ok so you want me to start with this line, right???shakespear wrote:do i only feel sad ?
ok let me start:
Do I only feel sad?
Or all the world with me?
Are you also sad?
If not, you are bad.
hahahah... so what do you think about this poem??
I think it's so lovely game
I'm waiting your comment............
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Sorry net was cut... Really i think u start writing lines ...u can complete it with many lines but be careful with grammar& dictation& meaning
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Wt u wana me start with? Choose any thing.. U know my ability.. Ok?
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
Ok.... But really if u try a poem it'll be better... Ok :
Will you really go far away?
Will you really go far away?
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