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A ROSE & A HELL

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:30 am

when i be u
when smiles be true
and life combain us too
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:58 am

i think it's " combine" my teacher...don't worry i got it...
my role:
when do you sweep my sad tear?
when do you make me happy?
when do remove my fear?
and catch my as all roads slippy?

good morning all my friends
our life is like a night mare
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:41 pm

when be toghter
and life leave us for ever
i'll hold ur tear and draw your smile

when sun hugs moon
and starts say ture
i'll chase u
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu Apr 17, 2014 8:42 pm

i'm ur sun, ur my moon
when can i meet u in fact
i'll fold earth and get u soon
and we'll make our pact
............
urs
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:06 pm

come my sun and shine my days
i'm waiting for long nights
come and let me have new page
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:18 pm

i'll break through ur room's wall
cuddle u to heal my thirsty
and jade ur perfume, my doll
to find out my love busty
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:31 pm

no more u win this time
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:43 pm

in all cases u win
u inspire me to sin
u teach me to defies all
u teach me to be tall
to go up and catch the sky
to have wings and fly


thnx
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Fri Apr 18, 2014 4:26 pm

Hello my friend:
I want write poem please help me and corect the wrong.
When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?

Thanks. I wait your coment.
we have to live our life freely
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Sat Apr 19, 2014 12:51 pm

farah wrote:When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?


hello farah:
first of all i wana apologize koz i'm late but at last i'm here now; some mistakes as i think:
reech= reach and there're some grammar mistakes so i'll write ur lines as i think the correct:
when can i reach my aim? or : when shall i reach my aim?
when i won't feel the same?
when will i get no blame?

really u wrote so lovely lines, you needed just some correction but at all you could say sth expressing.
i look forward to read more from you
have nice moments.
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