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Check the sentence below please. Is it okay?

Based on actual experience or perceptual knowledge would help you a lot, while without the experience or knowledge, you might feel not so easy to understand my introduction.

Based on actual experience or perceptual knowledge would help you a lot, while without the experience or knowledge, you might feel not so easy to understand my introduction.

Here is mine:
Actual experience or perceptual knowledge would help you a lot. You might feel hard to understand my introduction without them.

_Arale_

Thanks.

I prefer Arale's rewriting version.