I need your help
Posted: Mon Feb 07, 2005 3:41 pm
hi
dear reader can you help me to check and correct this composition
the question is
Try and imagine your slef in solitary confinment , write a short essay in wich you describe what would miss most, what books you think you would read, what possessions you would like to have with you .etc(120-140 WORDS)
and I wrote :
"It's my first day in the solitary confinment ..I'm full of hope , I feel that I can over come everthing ..my self confidence is getting higher.
I can't bear,I can't star here anymore ..that was myposition after one week,oh my God
I need to talk,I need someone , no no I need my mom , no I need my friend..Ii really need a shoulder to cry on ,I'm getting deprssed
It's very hard to stay in solitary confinment, I tried to imagine that,
I found it imposible.
I felt lonely and I was in a very bad mode
I think that imprisonment for life is an immoral punishment and very bad thing.
so when we decide to punish somewho , we have to think twice and seriously."
so can you check it for me ..
Rgards
dear reader can you help me to check and correct this composition
the question is
Try and imagine your slef in solitary confinment , write a short essay in wich you describe what would miss most, what books you think you would read, what possessions you would like to have with you .etc(120-140 WORDS)
and I wrote :
"It's my first day in the solitary confinment ..I'm full of hope , I feel that I can over come everthing ..my self confidence is getting higher.
I can't bear,I can't star here anymore ..that was myposition after one week,oh my God
I need to talk,I need someone , no no I need my mom , no I need my friend..Ii really need a shoulder to cry on ,I'm getting deprssed
It's very hard to stay in solitary confinment, I tried to imagine that,
I found it imposible.
I felt lonely and I was in a very bad mode
I think that imprisonment for life is an immoral punishment and very bad thing.
so when we decide to punish somewho , we have to think twice and seriously."
so can you check it for me ..
Rgards