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The 'help text' in my freeware game

Postby Wednesday » Thu Oct 27, 2011 4:25 pm

Hello,

I'm currently working on a small freeware game. It contains minimum of text, but now I decided to write a short help screen. English is not my forte (I'm Czech). Could someone please read my text and correct mistakes? I would be very grateful :-).

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About the game

This is a fun game for two players on one device. Avoid collisions and collect power-ups to defeat your opponent! Compete with friends in survival! How long can you safely control your curve?

Help

1)   Playing the game

This game is for two players. Each player controls one curve, which is continuously moving and becomes increasingly longer. The goal is to avoid overrunning the existing curves and not to leave the playing area – both decreases damage. The player who survives longer gets a point.

During the game, following power-ups may appear. These can be helpful for survival or put an opponent at disadvantage.

- /image of life power-up/ – Reduces damage of the curve
- /image of grow power-up/ – Temporarily increases the thickness of the curve
- /image of reduction power-up/ – Temporarily decreases the thickness of the curve
- /image of speed up power-up/ – Temporarily increases the speed of the curve
- /image of slow down power-up/ – Temporarily decreases the speed of the curve
- /image of clear power-up/ – Clears the playing area

Power-ups will take effect immediately after picking.

2)   Options on the main screen

- /image of color selector/ – Change the color of the player
- /image of round selection/ – Change the number of game rounds (one, three or five)
- /image of vibration icon/ – Turn on / off vibration
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Re: The 'help text' in my freeware game

Postby Josef » Fri Oct 28, 2011 6:04 am

IF I understand, these are the changes I would make. Some are corrections. Some are just style :roll:

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About the game

This is a fun game for two players on one device. Avoid collisions and collect power-ups to defeat your opponent! Compete with friends in survival! How long can you safely control your curve?

Help

1) Playing the game

This game is for two players. Each player controls one curve, which is continuously moving and becomes increasingly longer. The goal is to avoid overrunning the existing curves and not to leave the playing area – both decrease damage. The player who survives longer gets a point.

During the game, the following power-ups may appear. These can be helpful for survival or put an opponent at a disadvantage.

- /image of life power-up/ – Reduces damage to the curve
- /image of grow power-up/ – Temporarily increases thickness of the curve
- /image of reduction power-up/ – Temporarily decreases thickness of the curve
- /image of speed up power-up/ – Temporarily increases speed of the curve
- /image of slow down power-up/ – Temporarily decreases speed of the curve
- /image of clear power-up/ – Clears the playing area

Power-ups take effect immediately after selection.

2) Options on the main screen

- /image of color selector/ – Change color of player
- /image of round selection/ – Change number of game rounds (1, 3 or 4)
- /image of vibration icon/ – Turn vibration on/off
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Re: The 'help text' in my freeware game

Postby Wednesday » Sun Oct 30, 2011 6:23 pm

Thank you very much. Evidently I can not use definite and indefinite articles properly.

When the game is finished, I'll definitely post a link here.
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