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Cover letter for a summer job

Postby jeremyri » Sat Oct 26, 2013 2:49 pm

Hi everyone,

I wrote a cover letter to find a job in London, I would like to know if I have mistakes. I'm a french so sorry for my english.

Dear Sir or Madam

I am a student at an engineering school in Paris, in France and I am looking for a summer job. I will be available from July to September 2014. I am very interested to work in team and I can learn quickly in addition I have a strong adaptability in any situation. While working at the fast food company in France, I developed my customer service skills and I am convinced that working for you, should be the opportunity to improve my knowledges in this field.

I am very motivated to work and I have the conviction that international mobility is the best way to succeed in my personal and professional lives.

Finally, it should be the opportunity to practice foreign languages too. I have an intermediate English level and I am totally open learning more.

I thank you in advance, for your interest and the time you have spent looking at my resume. I look forward to hearing from you very soon.

Yours sincerely,



Thank you to help me :)
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Re: Cover letter for a summer job

Postby solzen » Mon Nov 04, 2013 9:37 pm

I think you did a great job :-) Not all of the red are mistakes, some are suggestions to make it more simple and natural. I suggest you say specifically why you want to work at this company; what makes it more desirable than any other company? Good luck!!

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a student at [name of school] in Paris, France and I am interested in a summer job at [name of company]. I will be available from July to September 2014. I am very interested in working in a team and feel I can learn quickly and adapt to any situation. While working at a fast food company [name it?] in France, I developed my customer service skills and I am convinced that working for you would be the best opportunity to improve my knowledge in this field.

I am very motivated to work and I have the conviction that international mobility is the best way to succeed in both my personal and professional life.

Finally, working at [name of company] would be an opportunity to practice foreign languages, too. I have intermediate English and I am completely [totally isn't wrong, this just sounds better to me] open to learning more. [You could also say "and I am interested in learning more."]

I thank you in advance [no comma] for your consideration and the time you have spent looking at my resume. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,
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