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Promotional piece: Grammar?

Posted: Sat Nov 30, 2013 11:54 am
by Paddington
Hi. If anyone could take the time to look over my promotional piece below, and correct any grammar mistakes that I may have made. I've replaced names and locations with dummy-words. I'm pretty certain using 'me and the team' is incorrect here. I'd rather use an alternative to the team and I, as I'd like to put myself at the foreground for promotional reasons.

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Very pleased! Just finished designing 'ParkA': CountryA's newest theme park.

Me and the team at CompanyA/CompanyB have created a multi-zone entertainment complex: ranging from amusement rides to retail stores and F&B outlets. Each zone is themed to a well-known video game IP; and set amidst a futuristic, cyberpunk world.

ParkA is located within AreaA/AreaB; a CompanyC development. Construction has begun, and the park is expecting completion by late 2015.

It's brilliant to have worked on such an exciting project and with such a talented team.

Re: Promotional piece: Grammar?

Posted: Sun Dec 01, 2013 10:17 am
by Paddington
Moderator, please delete this thread. Thanks