poem

[shakespear]

THE SLAVE
Slip my collar, give me freedom
Don't yoke me more than this
Your eyes captured me, I lost wisdom
I beg you nothing, but a will to kiss
Loving you truly, I got nothing
My heart bleeds, as a killed bird
There was, in my ears, a bell ring
Repeating your speech, word by word

[denvinbo]

Good....
----
What do you think about this?

Clouds float gently
Many distressed
Still in the heart
To the cold rain pour
Every night
I feel unhappy
Do you know???
In the middle of rolling dark
Your love like a dream
Blue the hope
Lead my life steps
To pass the bitter
Take away the dark clouds
Funny sun's shine
Sparkling and warm.....
When the rain stop
Our love is out of difficulty
Roll all long night
For the sun shine
So I will happy
And there's no doubt
Love like a song
Hand in hand
To give the warmth
And those two
Happy when they see
Each other.....
In a new day
Sunlight grow up the trees
And spread to all the yard
Sunlight pass through
The leaf canopy....
Wind play with the butterfly
Funny steps...
Happy and sweetly
We go together
To the peaceful place.....

[shakespear]

YOU HAVE GOOD WORDS AND GOOD IDEA AND I HOPE YOU`LL BE A GOOD POET BUT YOU`D BETTER SAY"breeese play with the butterfly " instead of "Wind play with the butterfly" .GOOD LUCK AND THANKS A LOT .

[denvinbo]

Thank you.......

[AASA]

so beautiful ....

[shakespear]

AAsa I`d like to thank you.

[denvinbo]

I'm listening to the wave of river's sound
I'm listening to the String wind's sound
Listen to the flowers
Love someone
Flare up on this world.

I'm listening to my voice
I'm listening...listening
Listen to my heart
Like as walking on the village.

The city tonight is full of stars
The river tonight is full of stars, too
Near your house
The ylang-ylang spread it perfume immensely
Night fog fly gently.

The city tonight is full of string
The vast love of cloud
Become a funny day
Just can't forget the old days
Return to the horizon
My city..........

What do you think about this???

[shakespear]

You`re really a poet and I hope nice future for you.Really I hope to reach at your level but it seems imposible.Good luck and thanks .

[denvinbo]

Nice command, thanks........

[shakespear]

not at all,my friend.