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LUST & SPIRIT

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LUST & SPIRIT

Postby shakespear » Fri May 09, 2008 12:01 pm

LUST & SPIRIT
Long time ago, I climbed the leafy tree
Which was wide-limbed
Reposing up there, I could feel two apples
They were hidden under leaves
At once I cried, how marvelous tree you're
How marvelous fruits you bear
I wanted to reap them
They were forbidden for everyone
Even me
Forbidden to reap
Forbidden to touch
Forbidden even to be seen
our life is like a night mare
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Re: LUST & SPIRIT

Postby sweets » Fri May 09, 2008 1:42 pm

shakespear wrote:LUST & SPIRIT
Long time ago, I climbed the leafy tree
Which was wide-limbed
Reposing up there, I could feel two apples
They were hidden under leaves
At once I cried, how marvelous tree you're
How marvelous fruits you bear
I wanted to reap them
They were forbidden for everyone
Even me
Forbidden to reap
Forbidden to touch
Forbidden even to be seen


the last four lines were powerful forbiden form every thing woooooooow
دخلت حياتي كنسمة وخرجت منها كإعصار
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Re: LUST & SPIRIT

Postby shakespear » Sat May 10, 2008 10:33 am

Hi
I didn`t understand ur comment
Could u explain it for me
Thanks
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Re: LUST & SPIRIT

Postby sweets » Sat May 10, 2008 1:36 pm

i mean that the four lines are about forbidens in life in genral "do touch ,do not this or that "and so on so when you combain these orders in simle lines i like them

cheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeers
دخلت حياتي كنسمة وخرجت منها كإعصار
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Re: LUST & SPIRIT

Postby shakespear » Wed May 14, 2008 8:46 am

Hi sweet
Ur comment seems better than my poem.
I like it.
Much things r forbidden to us.
our life is like a night mare
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Re: LUST & SPIRIT

Postby loola » Tue May 20, 2008 1:04 pm

I like ur pen when you'r writing .
very strong word and too nice .. I feel it
thank u my friend I want to read more
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Re: LUST & SPIRIT

Postby shakespear » Thu May 22, 2008 7:24 am

Hi loola
I who must thank u cuz u encourage me
Always I want to hear about u so be on contact and don`t be late
thanks again and good bye.
our life is like a night mare
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Re: LUST & SPIRIT

Postby shakespear » Thu Aug 07, 2008 12:26 pm

hi
r u with me?
r u waiting 4 me?
i love u but ............. u r not
good uck
bye
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Re: LUST & SPIRIT

Postby shakespear » Sat Nov 22, 2008 11:15 am

hi everyone and goodluck
our life is like a night mare
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Re: LUST & SPIRIT

Postby farah » Wed Mar 04, 2009 8:47 am

i think there is a connection between this poem and another poem u had written. right?
that poem about our parents and the paradise
we have to live our life freely
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