my beloved ......

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my beloved ......

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Observes me with her worried eyes

Quite as a creature of silence

Looks at me wishing to enter my mind

I feel of her glances searching about something

Something I know what it is, but I like to conceal

I prefer to keep her away of my problems

I don’t like her to carry more of worries

Mom, dear I am not your little child who used to care about sweets and joy

I am not that child who wished to be a princess

I am not that cheerful teenager who used to think about new dresses

I grew up, so everything have changed

Your carefree child became a concerned lady

Years affect badly on her pretty round face

Thinking of future shatters her, and I hope in final not to destroy her

She suffered so much to still your innocent and obedient girl in this wild society

She spends her time to be your successful daughter

She does everything to make you more proud of her

She loves you more than what you think, so she don’t like you to bear her current burdens

Enough what you did during the past

It is her turn now to prove that your life is not lost in vain

I still smiling with my original white smile to reassure her weak concern heart

Do not worry mom..I am good

Being beside you, makes me better



That is my first :-) try on creative forum ,so I want your feedback in what I wrote


all the best to you

Jasmine
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I like this so much Jasmine. :-)
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thanks krisi :-)
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very nice {-;
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Welcome Annaa
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