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Thinking about you, by Redhab

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Thinking about you, by Redhab

Postby Redhab » Tue Jul 29, 2008 4:51 pm

Hi everybody ,,
How's it going ??

Today my topic is a poem ..
I wrote it when i was feeling so bored and lonely .. :-(


Alone i Walk down the Street ..
With nObody to hold my hands ..
My heart is empty deep inSide ..
My brain is busy thinkin' about you ..
I can see u're beautiful, ur eyes, lips ..
Everything on you lo0ks great ..

I spend my days and nights dreaming of u ..
Everytime i go to bed, i can see u laying beside me ..
Please my prince, come to me, rescue me ..
Idont want to live without you ..

Come to me, Hold my hand ..
Let us fly togather, hand by hand ..
I want to take you to the moon, sun, and mars ..
I want to take you everywhere ..

Let us enjoy every moment of our life ..
I want to danCe with you, kiss you, and feel u deep inSide ..
I waked up, and opened my eyes ,,
and lo0ked through my window outside ..
And thanked god for the beautiful dream i had ..

Please come back again in my dreams ..
let me feel you, touch you, and hold ur hand ..
I LOVE you so much, just like Romeo & Juliet ..

P.S : i care about ur opinion .. so plz tell me the truth
was it go0d or no ?

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Re: Thinking about you, by Redhab

Postby Annaa » Sat Aug 02, 2008 10:31 am

I really like this poem,it`s so nice.I think that you are e very good writer {-; .
If you don`t like me remember it's mind over matter..I don't mind and you don't matter..
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Re: Thinking about you, by Redhab

Postby sweets » Sun Aug 03, 2008 8:21 am

hi redhab

well i read ur poem i like the first lines most of all cuz. u really write how is world when ur lonely :-(
maybe ur love is bigger than Romeo & Juliet
keep on writing
cheeeeeeeeeeeeers
دخلت حياتي كنسمة وخرجت منها كإعصار
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Re: Thinking about you, by Redhab

Postby angeleyez » Sun Aug 03, 2008 9:42 am

Wow.... Nice poem... I like it very much.. keep it up {-; {-:
Please... Correct me if I have a spelling mistake !
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Re: Thinking about you, by Redhab

Postby Redhab » Fri Sep 05, 2008 12:58 pm

thnxx all for reading my poem ,,
im still a beginner and so i dont expect
alot of ppl to like it ..
but im glad u did .. i will try to keep
u updated with my new poems .. and plzz
keep in touch .. see ya
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