When mind looks like mine
My head will explode.
My blood will flow on the road.
And my mind will explore
The door on the floor.
I can't sleep, I sweat.
Like a toy I can't enjoy.
When I pray they play. *
They say "Way may lay the day."
Can't be hungry, can't be angry.
Cannot cry, can't find any sky.
Can you hope when game is dirty ?
Can you believe shame is pretty ?
* I wanted to write it : "When I pray and pay they stay "okay" and play hockey." but it's too long.
Don't panic, it's fictive... my mind is healthy, motivated, happy and optimistic.
Shokin
When mind looks like a mine...
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Re: When mind looks like a mine...
wooow wooow and wooow
ur words are so beautiful ..
yes i swear i like it
thank u shoin
ur words are so beautiful ..
yes i swear i like it
thank u shoin
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Re: When mind looks like a mine...
wauw.. very Good ! I like it, too... keep it up!
Please... Correct me if I have a spelling mistake !
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Re: When mind looks like a mine...
I think so! (dreadful, huh?)shokin wrote: When I pray they play. *
Shokin
Nice poem Shokin...
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Re: When mind looks like a mine...
+1Krisi wrote:I think so! (dreadful, huh?)shokin wrote: When I pray they play. *
Shokin
Nice poem Shokin...
not bad work
Scio me nihil scire. (Latin)
I know, that I know nothing. (By Socrates)
I know, that I know nothing. (By Socrates)
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Re: When mind looks like a mine...
wooooooooow
I agree with you guys its wonderful.
hope you write something for us again.
I agree with you guys its wonderful.
hope you write something for us again.
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