Pure Hatred prt. 2

[Tido]

Your bones to ashes
I hated you so
my words to dust
mother said let go...
HATRED
created this monster lurking inside of me
He says yes, I say no
He says make a mess, I say when well you go?
He never rests, father I hate you so...
I fell ill to this test, your poison, your addiction...
HATRED
for you tanted my soul
monster grows stronger by each passing day
I grow weary to your trickery
please, stay away
I can't stand your mockery
the smell of his felthy array
HATRED
FATHER!!! come meet your Demon Child
come meet your blasphomay
I welcome you to my salvation
come meet the monster in me
lust for chaos...
I wait for the day of my salvation...

[Psixochka]

Well, your both poems are full of negative emotions and I see that you just throw your bad feelings in them. I think you should edit your poems or write another one.

[shakespear]

hi friend :
i think this poem expresses sth inside ur heart.in addition i think u r suffering.
any way it`s good although it`s surrealistic.
gd luck friend.