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Only Autumn

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Only Autumn

Postby justme » Sat Jul 04, 2009 9:51 pm

Sweet heart !
Life without you
like a tree
no blossome , no fruit
without you
i forget enjoy every season
now i have one season
only autumn , only autumn
Love is the master key that opens the gates of happiness.
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Re: Only Autumn

Postby sweets » Sun Jul 05, 2009 10:15 am

so lovely so imagitive so creative with sesnse of passion

What can i say more of that

NOTHING
i really like the use of similarty

but Autumn also can be season of love

CHHHHHHHHHHHHERS
دخلت حياتي كنسمة وخرجت منها كإعصار
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Re: Only Autumn

Postby shakespear » Mon Jul 06, 2009 10:20 am

hello
again u r fantastic and i think just the title of the poem has high expression so its fantastic in every thing.
i like to say that u used autumn to express the end of love ,its my point of view although autumn usually expresses the end of life and i consider the end of love is the end of life. also u used sleepless night which expresses the boring life at the end, waiting death and it is like waiting the death of love. also u used fruitless tree expresse the living in vain without love and also u used the non_pleasure in seasons
every thing is high expression
ur poem is simple and understood easily
thnx and hope nice day to u
our life is like a night mare
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Re: Only Autumn

Postby justme » Tue Jul 07, 2009 11:14 am

thank you very much sweet & shakespear
sweets wrote:so lovely so imagitive so creative with sesnse of passion

What can i say more of that

NOTHING
i really like the use of similarty

but Autumn also can be season of love

CHHHHHHHHHHHHERS

thank u sweet u like it...
i am happy now because i am part of this club !
Love is the master key that opens the gates of happiness.
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Re: Only Autumn

Postby justme » Tue Jul 07, 2009 11:24 am

shakespear wrote:hello
again u r fantastic and i think just the title of the poem has high expression so its fantastic in every thing.
i like to say that u used autumn to express the end of love ,its my point of view although autumn usually expresses the end of life and i consider the end of love is the end of life. also u used sleepless night which expresses the boring life at the end, waiting death and it is like waiting the death of love. also u used fruitless tree expresse the living in vain without love and also u used the non_pleasure in seasons
every thing is high expression
ur poem is simple and understood easily
thnx and hope nice day to u

thank you so much shakespear ur explanation is very great you are such a great poet becauce you know very well about expressions , sensations , up and down feelings and easily understod that what i want say ..
if i say you are my voice of feelings.... that's right , this is my first poem so i need your advice , i check your poems and i inspire yor writting ...
so i need your help ....
Thank you again !
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