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CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Postby sweets » Tue Jul 28, 2009 5:25 pm

Can you close your eyes for a while and forget world around ????

I tried that many times before but i could'nt because iam a part of this world

"So for who get many downs in their lives including me i wrote these lines"

Can't you see beauty around calling you to enjoy with her? can't you see the beauty of child's smile how senstive how pure?


Can't you smell roses, flowers
the smell of soil after rainy night ????
Enjoy with that


Can't you hear bird's singing ,leaves movement how magical
Or waiting to hear you name's lettlers are spelt form beloved lips???


Can't you touch things around no matter how soft or rought they are??


Can't you taste joy ,passion wether sorrow or sweet?

Since you and me can see ,hear , touch ,taste and smell So why you do not open your eyes widely and enjoy life ,Do not stand alone

LIFE IS SHORT TO STAND AND THINK
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Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Postby Psixochka » Wed Jul 29, 2009 6:07 am

Hi, sweety {-;

LIFE IS SHORT TO STAND AND THINK - these words are my favourite!!!
Sometimes I walk in the city and feel so happy, I enjoy just seeing trees, smell favour of sea... I like your poem 8-)
Scio me nihil scire. (Latin)
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Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Postby Vega » Wed Jul 29, 2009 7:36 am

sweets wrote: LIFE IS SHORT TO STAND AND THINK


It should be: "Life is short, stand and think".
Some people are used to postpone to think about something they have on their minds for another "beautiful day". That day never comes.
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Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Postby shakespear » Wed Jul 29, 2009 11:37 am

hello every body
sorry sweet i was not here to commet ur poem .
i think ur poem is free verse but the words are beautiful and go deep inside souls.the words also touch the hearts and leave an effect on them. the style and idea is very good although i like to hear rhymed lines but its ok.
i wished i were the 1st to comment ur poem so forgive me
any hope to be ur..................
c u and gd luck
our life is like a night mare
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Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Postby sweets » Wed Jul 29, 2009 5:24 pm

woooooooooooooooow
3comments for the first day how lucky iam

shakespear wrote:hello every body
sorry sweet i was not here to commet ur poem .
i think ur poem is free verse but the words are beautiful and go deep inside souls.the words also touch the hearts and leave an effect on them. the style and idea is very good although i like to hear rhymed lines but its ok.
i wished i were the 1st to comment ur poem so forgive me
any hope to be ur..................
c u and gd luck


do not worry for not being the first and you know me well i like to try every thing :-D and thank you so much for ur comment

Xkalibur wrote:
sweets wrote: LIFE IS SHORT TO STAND AND THINK


It should be: "Life is short, stand and think".
Some people are used to postpone to think about something they have on their minds for another "beautiful day". That day never comes.


you did'nt read my oddes for a long time so reading ur comment make me happy about ur idea about life i agree and do'nt agree sametime as i said before LIFE IS SHORT so the time we used to think we can use to live new experince iam not saying to do something wrong to experment it but thinking sometime kills the moments of joy which hardly we live it.

Psixochka wrote:Hi, sweety

LIFE IS SHORT TO STAND AND THINK - these words are my favourite!!!
Sometimes I walk in the city and feel so happy, I enjoy just seeing trees, smell favour of sea... I like your poem 8-)


so did i dear a moment for pure to forget all pains
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Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Postby shakespear » Thu Jul 30, 2009 7:16 am

hello
u r welcome
don't u know who u r for me??
c u
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Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Postby sweets » Thu Jul 30, 2009 5:18 pm

shakespear wrote:hello
u r welcome
don't u know who u r for me??
c u


i know who you are my best friend
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Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Postby shakespear » Sat Aug 01, 2009 1:17 pm

hello
read this.....
i know you're know
ask me i won't say no
we're friends, don't you think so?
if u ignore me, when i'll then go?
i know and you know
my back became like bow
o dear! hundreds oh and oh
your beauty made me undergo
i know you're know
thnx and c u soooooooooooooooooooooooooon :-D
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Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Postby sweets » Sun Aug 02, 2009 1:54 pm

wait
beacuse i know that u know that what i know
let's stay as we are
since i can't play with u
since i can't cheat u

so you know what i know

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Re: CAN YOU !!!!!!!!!!

Postby shakespear » Sun Aug 02, 2009 2:55 pm

hello
................
hurry up an' don't say wait !
we always are slow and late !
cheat me if this will be my fate ,
check me and say my rate !
cheat me but don't say wait !
cheat me ,i won't hate,
accept me in any state !
......................
thnx and good luck
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