What do you think of my poem?

[Kapellert]

Hi! I'm a 23 years old student from Russia, I write poems and recently I tried to write one in English Could you please check it and write what you think about it?
Thanks:)

Good night, my darling, I don't know
How will I spens this night without
Your smiling lips... I miss you so,
But what I feel I can't find out.

And now I see I don't know how
I will exist without reason,
I'm sqeezed and squashed, my beauty, now,
But heart still listens to your breathing...

[shakespear]

hi
its good and i wanna say :
go ahead
c u

[Jessica]

I was really taken by your poem. The poem expressed deep emotional feelings and allowed the reader to feel what you were feeling.

[GHeeDa]

Hi dear,
It's really nice and deep, but i think you can make something better by expressing more feelings ,,

Keep it Up ,

Regards..

[LEATRICE]

It sounds quite sweet and soft, it's quite impressive already
But in my opinion, it'll be better if "reason" and "breathing" this set of rhymes in the second stanza is replaced by words that rhyme with "out", just like what you have in your first stanza
Then your poem will probably sound more peaceful, romantic.
A continuously harmonious atmosphere can be constucted:)