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Re: strange sonnet

Postby LEATRICE » Sat Aug 29, 2009 8:14 am

Rich "sound" content
alliterations, consonances, assonances
it's an interesting piece of poem

But the last couplet somehow destroys the continuity and congruity :-(
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Re: strange sonnet

Postby shakespear » Mon Aug 31, 2009 9:12 am

hello
i think u r right but i intended to do that and i was able to do alliteration
thnx 4 this comment and really u seem expert in literature
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Re: strange sonnet

Postby farah » Thu Sep 10, 2009 9:28 am

Hi I aske sweet about u and her but she didn't answer me and I think u can answer me please r u in love with her.? I am sorry about this question but I want to know I am not envy her .i shall wait for the answer .bye
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Re: strange sonnet

Postby shakespear » Thu Sep 10, 2009 9:38 am

Hi I think its not ur affair in addition I'm here to hear comment on my poem not to hear that and I wish she loves me koz she is very education and has high spirit so if she loves me I'll swim in the sea at night in the winter and account the sand of the shore and drops of rains and leaves of trees so don't ask me about that again plz …..
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Re: strange sonnet

Postby sweets » Thu Sep 10, 2009 10:05 am

shakespear wrote:Hi I think its not ur affair in addition I'm here to hear comment on my poem not to hear that and I wish she loves me koz she is very education and has high spirit so if she loves me I'll swim in the sea at night in the winter and account the sand of the shore and drops of rains and leaves of trees so don't ask me about that again plz …..
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Re: strange sonnet

Postby shakespear » Thu Sep 10, 2009 10:50 am

hi sweet and thnx 4 this
c u and have nice day
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Re: strange sonnet

Postby Player » Sat Sep 12, 2009 10:42 pm

sonnet (noun): a poem of fourteen lines using any of a number of formal rhyme schemes, in English typically having ten syllables per line

Well, it's 14 lines ok. And most have 10 syllables.
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Re: strange sonnet

Postby shakespear » Sun Sep 13, 2009 8:29 am

hello
thnx palyer 4 this msg but u did n't value my poem so plz send me ur comment about the poem
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Re: strange sonnet

Postby Player » Sun Sep 13, 2009 8:44 am

I think it's a very clever strange sonnet.

But if you intend it to be a sonnet - typically with 14 lines and typically 10 syllables per line (which seems to be what you do intend) - then I think you should try to fix the lines that don't have 10 syllables.

Just my humble opinion, since you ask me to value your sonnet :roll:
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Re: strange sonnet

Postby shakespear » Wed Sep 23, 2009 9:36 am

hello
its typical as u said , the poem contains 14 linesand every line has 10 syllables .it is ab ab cd cd ef ef gg so plz show me what have i to do?
really u seem very good in poetry and i like to make use of ur information.
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