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Ode from inside a jail

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Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Wed Aug 18, 2010 6:33 am

Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?” ……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time
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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Wed Aug 18, 2010 6:37 am

shakespear wrote:Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?”

……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time
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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby sweets » Wed Aug 18, 2010 7:20 pm

hi

frankly i do not know wht to write it's like a story i read it and imagen it sametime imagen how passion and love help heroin the poem to pass time and not to forget her

ur great man
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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Wed Aug 18, 2010 9:44 pm

hello
ok u r the first to comment my poem and i think did not like it much koz u didn't appreciate it, u didn't say if its good or bad . but as u said it is like story , indeed its a story happened inside a jail. a story of one loves and dreams to meet his sweetheart again.
thnx 4 ur comment
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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby farah » Fri Aug 20, 2010 7:46 am

shakespear wrote:Ode from inside a jail

How could I live in that miserable jail?
Bad food, bad drink and even the smell was bad.
Criminals, robbers, perverts . .were all pale
All seemed tired or miserable or sad.
……………………………………………………………….
I used to look into your dreamy eyes,
Look at the sky to see the shinning moon,
To see radiant stars, in large or small size.
Thence I wondered, “ Can I see your eyes soon?” ……………………………………………………………….
Your phantom’s coming to me every time,
Stand by me, I wished to hug ‘t tightly.
On the walls of the jail, I carved my rhyme,
By that dim lamp, I could see it slightly.
……………………………………………………………….
Drops of my blood flowed on the jail’s ground.
A needle incised your name on my tired chest.
I had shouted at the top of my sound,
“ Like you, where can I find? In east or west?
……………………………………………………………….
On the walls, there is a motto “ Oh brother . .
Read my kind advice! To you I’m loyal . .
No doubt, every flower will soon wither
But the sweet memory will stay immortal.


Have nice time




YOU ARE FANTASTIC
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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby sweets » Fri Aug 20, 2010 8:47 pm

shakespear wrote:hello
ok u r the first to comment my poem and i think did not like it much koz u didn't appreciate it, u didn't say if its good or bad . but as u said it is like story , indeed its a story happened inside a jail. a story of one loves and dreams to meet his sweetheart again.
thnx 4 ur comment
gd lk


my dear freind
i did not say it's bad one i like it
i still loosing my talent i do not know wht's up if u ave any advices plz send some
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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby msaabneh » Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:40 am

oh my god!!! did you write this?
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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby msaabneh » Mon Aug 30, 2010 3:59 am

i am an English literature graduate. yet, i thought this poem belongs to Shakespeare. plz mention your real name here. its a crime for a person like you to be nameless. i want to put it on my Facebook page, so i wouldn't put it without your name.
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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby RoseRed » Mon Aug 30, 2010 6:32 pm

Nice poem, i liked it, sorry i'm busy these days! u are nice poetman! kisses
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Re: Ode from inside a jail

Postby shakespear » Mon Aug 30, 2010 6:52 pm

thanks 4 those who show comments
any one wants to write it on facebook its ok
my name is darkstar
thnx again 4 ur comments
gd lk
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