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the brute

Postby shakespear » Sat Nov 20, 2010 3:33 pm

The Brute

Day by day , we all approach the grave
Looking at the past , we regret our days
We run so fast and we all crave….
Living peacefully many different ways
* * *
But he runs so fast too after us
Since we were children, we did all fear him
And we’re now men , but he still makes his fuss
And even we become old, we’ll see him dim
* * *
We escape from him for evermore
Every one, who stumbles, will be soon slaughtered
And every one, who’s saved, will enter the door
And sleep forever there to be measured
* * *
Day by day we turn over our date-page
Unconscious we don’t feel the time run fast
Everyday he pushes us towards old age,
Towards future, leaving behind our past
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Re: the brute

Postby sweets » Mon Nov 22, 2010 4:10 pm

well i look for words to say here what i could comment

snice we born we know that
oneday we'll be underground

sometimes we ignore many times we forget that
we learn and makemistakes
we laugh in few times and cry almost of time

day by day we grow and get old
and start to remmber our mistakes and luagh
our crys our regert
but hardly we remmber who make us smile
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Re: the brute

Postby shakespear » Mon Nov 22, 2010 7:24 pm

cheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeer
hello
i think ur words are more beautiful than mine and i have to give u ideas and make u write the poem instead of me
i think u got the meaning of " the brute" so u r so clever
really i wished to hear ur comment on my poem but now ok
thnx
have nice moments
c u
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Re: the brute

Postby sweets » Tue Nov 23, 2010 6:54 pm

i think i comment well on ur odd by my odd
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Re: the brute

Postby shakespear » Wed Nov 24, 2010 7:20 am

hello
i've read ur ode once and twice and more
really the beaty of ur ode prevented me to see ur comments , maybe i'm busy-minded ...maybe i was busy in other things ....but at last i can't see the meanings among the lines
what a pity! i lost my intelegence when i knew she loved me....
plz show me ur comments frankly koz i'm no more clever..
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Re: the brute

Postby sweets » Wed Nov 24, 2010 4:36 pm

ahahaha ur going to lose ur mind soon if u keep on this way in love

wht i wanna to say that ur odd is really good coz u talk about new theme how life go without feeling with it few times we enjoy much and wanna this moment to last 4ever
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Re: the brute

Postby shakespear » Fri Nov 26, 2010 4:28 pm

hello
thnx 4 this comment and i think i'd better not to fall in love koz i got just torture from it , u know how miserable is when man loves a woman and she prevents him after giving hope and encourages him. i think he'll sleep nights restlessly , spend nights crying , damn his unlucky destiny. how that woman can live without feeling guilt?, how can she live comfortable?, tranquil, relax...? really i don't know
but i thank u koz u warned, and awoke me with this point that i must not love in that way , as if u said " don't be loyal to whom u love" ...really i don't know another way in love just one way that the lovers must be loyal....
thnx again my friend really u awoke me and i'll follow ur advice and kill my heart or get it out of my chest and live without it...
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Re: the brute

Postby sweets » Sat Nov 27, 2010 5:37 pm

omg
i know how much ur sad and have broken heart and imagen how sad ur

i wish ican help u and draw hope seeds in ur heart againe but in same time harsh reailty is better than sweet dreams i tried that once and this iswht i waked on !!!!!!!!! so are same freind

as i guess this lady now as much as she feels guilty and wish to back to u she belives this iste best to u coz she really loves u believe me !!!!!!!!!!
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Re: the brute

Postby shakespear » Sun Nov 28, 2010 3:52 pm

God keeps u
i have no doubt that she is loyal to me, may be i'm wrong.....
yes u r right that harsh reality better than sweet dreams koz we oneday shall wake up from that sweet dreams and shall live the harsh reality..... but why don't we live the short sweet dream in its time and live the harsh reality in time? can't we do that? don't u think that we'd better live our short sweet dreams?
thnx again koz u explain ur point of view.....
have nice moments and have good luck
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Re: the brute

Postby shakespear » Fri Feb 04, 2011 6:05 pm

i wanna say
why don't we live the short sweet dream in its time and live the harsh reality in time? can't we do that? don't u think that we'd better live our short sweet dreams?
that's all
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