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WE KNOW

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WE KNOW

Postby shakespear » Fri Feb 04, 2011 5:05 pm

We know

I know that you know
ask me I won't say no
we're friends, don't you think so?
if u ignore me, where I’ll then go?
I know and you know
my back became like a bow
o dear! hundreds oh and oh
your beauty made me undergo
I know that you know

hurry up an' don't say wait !
we always are slow and late !
we’ll lost our intimate date
cheat me if this is my fate ,
check me and tell me the rate !
cheat me but don't say wait !
cheat me , you.. I won't hate,
that I know you are my fate
then accept me in any state !
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Re: WE KNOW

Postby shakespear » Fri Feb 04, 2011 5:15 pm

sorry for all readers...
i want to correct a word at the line 12" we'll lost..."
the correct is " we'll lose"
thnx for all readers
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Re: WE KNOW

Postby manal » Fri Feb 04, 2011 7:04 pm

hi shakespear and welcome back,
in fact the most important feature that attract me in urpoems is the simpilicity in attrance with the strength in meaning,how great u r friend,keep it up :-D
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Re: WE KNOW

Postby shakespear » Fri Feb 04, 2011 7:55 pm

thnx friend u always present here to encourage me and i thank god i know u
thnx again and have lovely moments
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Re: WE KNOW

Postby manal » Sat Feb 05, 2011 10:57 am

shakespear is always welcome {-:
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Re: WE KNOW

Postby sweets » Sat Feb 05, 2011 2:16 pm

my dear friend

u always inspire me to write but i'm sure that my writes will not be like yours

this time ur odd reminds me with that game "i know "

so I know that you know nothing stay at all and who knows what this heart carries for u ?
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Re: WE KNOW

Postby shakespear » Sun Feb 06, 2011 2:41 pm

hi
i meant by this odd " i know that u know i'm in love with u "
the 2nd line means" ask u whatever u like i won't say no and i'll obey"
then if u refused me so when will i go koz i have none but u and no place,
i know and u know that my back became like bow koz i spent my life waiting for u to accept me, and because the hurt of ur love i said oh and oh and oh....and lots of oh that i suffer from ur bueaty...
this is the 1st stanza and i wish u can express the 2nd stanza
good luck
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Re: WE KNOW

Postby sweets » Mon Feb 07, 2011 4:00 pm

ok according to my stand for this stanza let me say ................
that lover wanna love he wanna to feel that he belongs to some one ...he wanna feel with stability he wanaa she to cheat him if she can but not leaving him .

for she i guees she is asking him to wait coz she is afraid from manythings and she refuses to till him why

this is my comment
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Re: WE KNOW

Postby shakespear » Mon Feb 07, 2011 5:03 pm

hellooooooooo
u r not only sweet but in addition u r clever and i said u r perfect
that is right he feels that he belongs just to her not to another one that koz of his passion, his love, his ador,....
he asked her not to say wait koz they were late in living togather, don't say wait koz she was afraid of ppl may they see him and his lover togather, the life will end soon and they r late
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Re: WE KNOW

Postby sweets » Tue Feb 08, 2011 7:11 am

hi
(she was afraid of ppl may they see him and his lover togather, the life will end soon and they r late)

i guess ur right that her biggest fear
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