she was alone that night,no one but she.she lay on her bed putting her head with the gray hair on the soft billow and started thinking...
many things passed in her mind,many old memories,events,situations and people.
it was along time since they had met last one,it was an imagenative night,,they laughed ,sang and danced untill dawn.they were so happy and peacefull.she remembered how the sky seemed that night,it was so brilliant.the stars were moving to draw a wonderful image full of passion and the breeze was dancing with the beautiful lilac to spread its nice perfume all over there,every thing was sharing the joyful event...
she turned her face to the other side and looked throgh the light browen certains to the shining moon.it seemed quite and silent ,it was not so that night...
"how things can be easily changed!" she whispered with a deep sigh.next to her on the table,a photo was put,it was for a beautiful lady with a golden hair and blue eyes shining like stars.she had a glance to it and smiled dimly,"how pretty i was when u where with me!" she whispered again.
After short moments she sat weakly and calmly she moved to the wooden door,she opend it quitly and went out .she passed the old stairs smoothly and got out to the garden.the atmosphere was still calm,no movement,no sounds and even no light.the shining moon was idle ...she moved through for a while ,untill a tender voice was heard"mum u have to get inside ,it is too cold ."she glanced the chilled sky once again and started walking to the inside.Before she got there she stopped at a wooden board hanged above the door...
"old age hospital" was written,she turned towards the little lilac next to her with a wan smile.
Gray hair!
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("how things can be easily changed!" )
yes it's so strange to see how time pass too fast how we were kids then young ten old wt gray hair
i like ur story koz it's so simple with full images and meanings
well done
yes it's so strange to see how time pass too fast how we were kids then young ten old wt gray hair
i like ur story koz it's so simple with full images and meanings
well done
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thanx sweets ,u r always here for supporting all
wishing to read something new from u soon.
wishing to read something new from u soon.
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thanx 4 ur words
i'm looking for something inspire me to write
i'm looking for something inspire me to write
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Re: Gray hair!
hi sweets,
here i will advise u as our friend shakespeare has advised me...
"u just hold the pen",world around us is full of inspired things,just u look!
have nice moments.
here i will advise u as our friend shakespeare has advised me...
"u just hold the pen",world around us is full of inspired things,just u look!
have nice moments.
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hello
i'm sorry koz i wasn't here 2 c this great story..
very good story ..this story is rich of many images and expressions... ("how things can be easily changed!" )its the loveliest term in ur story... really i liked it and i've read it one and twice focusingly to discover the sense behind it. there is a sense behind ur story and we can touch that through the term "old age hospital " that means, she is now without relatives or friends or a lover, she is now alone, she is now in this hospital of the old-aged people.
in ur story there were few mistakes as i think:
line 1/ u said " lay" the right is " laid" (grammatical mistake)
line 10/ u said "it was not so that night" (i didn't get ur intention)
line 13/ u said "when u where" the right is "when u were" ( mistake in dictation)
forgive me 4 these notes but i can't ignor or disregard that and u have to correct it
plz go ahead and don't stop..go .. go .. go.....don't stop and i'll wait 4 u to enrich us with ur great stories.
thnx
i'm sorry koz i wasn't here 2 c this great story..
very good story ..this story is rich of many images and expressions... ("how things can be easily changed!" )its the loveliest term in ur story... really i liked it and i've read it one and twice focusingly to discover the sense behind it. there is a sense behind ur story and we can touch that through the term "old age hospital " that means, she is now without relatives or friends or a lover, she is now alone, she is now in this hospital of the old-aged people.
in ur story there were few mistakes as i think:
line 1/ u said " lay" the right is " laid" (grammatical mistake)
line 10/ u said "it was not so that night" (i didn't get ur intention)
line 13/ u said "when u where" the right is "when u were" ( mistake in dictation)
forgive me 4 these notes but i can't ignor or disregard that and u have to correct it
plz go ahead and don't stop..go .. go .. go.....don't stop and i'll wait 4 u to enrich us with ur great stories.
thnx
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Re: Gray hair!
manal wrote:hi sweets,
here i will advise u as our friend shakespeare has advised me...
"u just hold the pen",world around us is full of inspired things,just u look!
have nice moments.
hi
just tell me what's the use of writing since nobody to share with
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line 1/ u said " lay" the right is " laid" (grammatical mistake)
line 10/ u said "it was not so that night" (i didn't get ur intention)
line 13/ u said "when u where" the right is "when u were" ( mistake in dictation)
forgive me 4 these notes but i can't ignor or disregard that and u have to correct it
plz go ahead and don't stop..go .. go .. go.....don't stop and i'll wait 4 u to enrich us with ur great stories.
thnx[/quote]
wow wow wooooooooooooooow,today i am really the happiest one in this world!
where were u shakespeare,i waited for along time
ok after thank u i say,
line 1/it was a grammatical mistake ,i am sorry!
line 10/by that phrase i wanted to show that when we live happy moments we imagin that every thing in the world is happy too,that every thing is sharing us our happiness,in that night the moon was brilliant and active from her point of view or ,lets say, she felt so.but now as she is in the autumn of her age with the harsh moments she lives,the whole universe has no value!she was comparing the moon in both situations.
line/13 was a dictation mistake,i am sorry.
thanx alot for u,in fact i have written this story to read such a comment from u.
line 10/ u said "it was not so that night" (i didn't get ur intention)
line 13/ u said "when u where" the right is "when u were" ( mistake in dictation)
forgive me 4 these notes but i can't ignor or disregard that and u have to correct it
plz go ahead and don't stop..go .. go .. go.....don't stop and i'll wait 4 u to enrich us with ur great stories.
thnx[/quote]
wow wow wooooooooooooooow,today i am really the happiest one in this world!
where were u shakespeare,i waited for along time
ok after thank u i say,
line 1/it was a grammatical mistake ,i am sorry!
line 10/by that phrase i wanted to show that when we live happy moments we imagin that every thing in the world is happy too,that every thing is sharing us our happiness,in that night the moon was brilliant and active from her point of view or ,lets say, she felt so.but now as she is in the autumn of her age with the harsh moments she lives,the whole universe has no value!she was comparing the moon in both situations.
line/13 was a dictation mistake,i am sorry.
thanx alot for u,in fact i have written this story to read such a comment from u.
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hi ,sweets wrote:manal wrote:hi sweets,
here i will advise u as our friend shakespeare has advised me...
"u just hold the pen",world around us is full of inspired things,just u look!
have nice moments.
hi
just tell me what's the use of writing since nobody to share with
is not it enough that u and me share it!!
just u start
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hi
thnx all and have nice moments
really i agree with manal, and as she said " isn't it enough that we share comments with u? and i think u have lots of friends in this club more than any one has...many friends here wants to comment on ur topics and waiting to read any thing by u, so plz just write and u'll find us snatch ur write....sweets wrote:hi
just tell me what's the use of writing since nobody to share with
thnx all and have nice moments
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manal and shakespear
thanx for cheering words but the real problem that i lose my interst in everything
thanx for cheering words but the real problem that i lose my interst in everything
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dear sweets,
what u feel is an ordinary thing in our life,sometimes we r happy and full of live while at others we are...
try to come over any obstacle,we r always here for u sweets
what u feel is an ordinary thing in our life,sometimes we r happy and full of live while at others we are...
try to come over any obstacle,we r always here for u sweets
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merci for ur lovely words
but believe my i'm starting lossing my mind
but believe my i'm starting lossing my mind
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hello sweeti,,,
here an invitation for u to REread ur post titled as"TO achieve your dream remember your ABCs",i believe u may change ur mind!
have nice moments,
and be in touch..
here an invitation for u to REread ur post titled as"TO achieve your dream remember your ABCs",i believe u may change ur mind!
have nice moments,
and be in touch..
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manal wrote:hello sweeti,,,
here an invitation for u to REread ur post titled as"TO achieve your dream remember your ABCs",i believe u may change ur mind!
have nice moments,
and be in touch..
hi ur really make me smile thanx really thank u
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u r welcome!
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hellooooooooooooooo
u wrote this lovely piece but its not enough .... u have to continuo not to stop ..
plz try again and again and don't say excuses koz we don't accept excuses here , we like u to write and write so plz show us new things to amuse us...
thnx
u wrote this lovely piece but its not enough .... u have to continuo not to stop ..
plz try again and again and don't say excuses koz we don't accept excuses here , we like u to write and write so plz show us new things to amuse us...
thnx
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dear shakespeare,,
ur words mean a lot for us,,i regard u as the father of creative writing board...thanx a lot
ur words mean a lot for us,,i regard u as the father of creative writing board...thanx a lot
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hello
thnx 4 this lovely comment and i hope u can show us new piece
c u and have good luck
thnx 4 this lovely comment and i hope u can show us new piece
c u and have good luck
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very soon,,,just u wait....
best wishes....
best wishes....
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i'm waiting tooooooooo
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hi sweets
how r u dear,,,,i miss u sooooooooooooooooooooooooo much
how r u dear,,,,i miss u sooooooooooooooooooooooooo much
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manal wrote:hi sweets
how r u dear,,,,i miss u sooooooooooooooooooooooooo much
i miss u toooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
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Re: Gray hair!
it very great and useful story
thaaaaaaaaanx go a head
thaaaaaaaaanx go a head
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hi manofalsubeai...
ur words mean a lot for me....thanx a lot for ur kind passing...
ur words mean a lot for me....thanx a lot for ur kind passing...