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mayankjha
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""Many people believe that to move up the ladder of success and achievement,we must forget the past repress it relinquish it. But others have the opposiste opinion..

Do memories hinder or help people in their effort to learn form the past and succeed in the present..."

It is a true and undeniable fact that we all wih to see ourselves successful in our lives. Everyday we wake up with the motive of learning from our past mistakes and plan our future actions in order to achieve our target. Hence it would not be unjustified to say that analysing our past and linking it with our present is more a necessity than a choice.

Whatever we do at any moment of life has significance both in past and future. If it is a bad memory then we wish to remove it simply frm the sequence of our life owing to our involuntary tendency. The one who tries to be patient and tries tp find the cause behind it and tries hard to find his mistakes has greater chances of achieving his goal. Relinquishing or crushing our misdeeds will only bring more harm than good, as the great Indian saint Swami Vivekananda said, "Face the trouble and it shall not trouble you, the more you run away from it the more ominous wil it become."

As has been said many a times that failures are the stepping stones of success; but if we remove the failure from our lives how can we hope to move ahead and succeed. It is through self analysisi and pondering on the cause of our failures that most of the times we achieve our goal or task. Thus I would conculde by standing firm on the belief that analysing our mistakes and failures is certainly a very powerdul tool for succeeding in life..
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5

I think the writing is not coherent along with a lot of grammatical and punctuation mistakes
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