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DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

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DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

Postby shakespear » Thu Aug 11, 2011 9:43 pm

DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

Closely she whispered, her breath touched my ear
Time ago I didn't think of my past life
Now suddenly I feel inside me fear
In My heart, you have hard fixed your blunt knife
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She begged me not to make her weak next time
She used to be strict, hard as her father
She can't bear lovely speech, she hate soft rhyme
Try just once, than before you'll be smoother
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I made you of illusions, desires, and dreams
My statue will fall at the bleeding end
You work hard to destroy all my hopes, beams
unseen sky, deep seas… me you like to send
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God created us all of water and soil
On the earth ,the sons of the sky can't live
always you make my blood in my veins boil
we're not angels holding branch of olive
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I don't listen to you, though you are wise
No more I do open my heart's window
That I believe in my fatal demise
Accepting my fate, I start feeling low
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I know you desire me more as I do
So don't say any more, "Don't make me weak"
We are both alone, we can't find love in true
We have no time to spend on check or seek
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The wheel of the world's law will still revolve
We are not stones, dry trees or blocks of ice
How can we convince our needs? can you solve?
If the stone can breed, it will be very nice
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I'm not satan and you are not angel
I have virtues and you may have a vice
You have magic stick? convert the devil!
We make it once, why don't we make it twice?
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Wooooooooow………. I finished it and hope you enjoy reading it……… I hope you forgive my rudeness and badness, its just a poem ….some of it true and the most are false, so please don't criticize the idea and I like you concentrat on the style and diction. Thnx, plz send me ur comments koz I in need to ….
have happy times.
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

Postby Lara » Thu Aug 11, 2011 10:09 pm

shakespear wrote:I'm not satan and you are not angel.



Shakespear tell me your secret to write as you do it! well i dont know what to say, I think every body has feelings, and not all people will show it in the same way, or maybe some of us are afraid to love, this because of bad experiences, etc that's why we dont wanna the same situation repeats again. :)
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

Postby shakespear » Thu Aug 11, 2011 10:20 pm

hi
thnx 4 ur comment and i wana say u seem wise and ur words encouraged me
thnx again
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

Postby Lara » Thu Aug 11, 2011 10:25 pm

u r welcome friend!!
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

Postby shakespear » Fri Aug 12, 2011 7:45 am

shakespear wrote:We are not stones, dry trees or blocks of ice

i think its true not false
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

Postby sweets » Fri Aug 12, 2011 12:32 pm

shaki my freind

how bad u said about this poem but ur genius man u never lost ur talent or creativity
well i like the idea so much how love can let us confused ....lost between mind & heart this conflict which can last forever as i can see how to combain between them just tell me how ??

we are not stones, angles , santa or devils we simply are human beings man !!!!!!!!!!

finally ur poem in general is an invitation to release from any bonds can kill any pure honset feelings in this world no matter mind & heart are aruging with


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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

Postby Lara » Fri Aug 12, 2011 3:37 pm

shakespear wrote:
shakespear wrote:We are not stones, dry trees or blocks of ice


Yes; it's true, but some of us wanna overcome our weaknesses,and i belive in this phrase, and it's one of my goals: "Let the weakling say, "I am strong!"" Joel 3:10, and it encourages me to continue being as i am, so if we wanna be weak or strong it's our decison
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

Postby shakespear » Fri Aug 12, 2011 11:31 pm

hi
thnx 4 ur comments
sweets i wana c ur poems ...try and try , don't stop
thnx lara 4 ur interest
have nice moments
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

Postby sweets » Sat Aug 13, 2011 5:09 pm

i'm trying my best but nothing come maybe i loose my talent forever
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Re: DON'T MAKE ME WEAK

Postby shakespear » Sun Aug 14, 2011 1:32 am

hi
special ppl , distinguised ppl like us won't lose thier talent koz that means they die, so they keep thier gift till they reach to the grave...so try that u have sth inside u but it needs to motivate it and u'll find it b4 ur eyes , among ur fingers.....u'll find it marvelous poem as ur child moving and breathing...
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