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Postby sweets » Fri Sep 23, 2011 3:42 pm

what to say.... what to write.... what to tell..what to do ...i've alot !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Mind is always busy with nonses
Heart is always busy without hope

what can i say about all of that
i can't change these facts
what to write about me ..you.. my tears.. my worries.. my confusing..
what to tell about shall i tell about you or your shades??
what to do leaving or staying escaping or backing to you ??

what to say ..what to write .. what to tell.. what to do
my mind will explode oneday
my heart will bomb because of you
my tears must stop oneday
so be sure that i will stop loving you soooooooon

now it's your turn so can you tell me what to say ..what to write ..what to do ??????
i'm waiting for you
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Postby shakespear » Sat Sep 24, 2011 4:13 am

hi friend ...
at last we have here so lovely piece of poetry...some thing reminds u of ur notions and thoughts when they pass through ur mind....this poem is a query with self...it's a soliloquy....and it's really some thing new we didn't do before...
u made me think to try like this art of soliloquy although it seems hard...
have nice moments and accept my regards
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Re: for you ........

Postby sweets » Sat Sep 24, 2011 6:03 am

gdmorning friend thanx 4 ur this comment and i hope to ur reply in poetic way soon
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Postby shakespear » Sun Sep 25, 2011 6:12 am

gd morning
so i'll be waiting 4 ur poems and u'll find me always here close and waiting to reply and to write poems...
i hope u succeed in ur life and have nice times
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Postby sweets » Tue Sep 27, 2011 4:37 am

thanx for ur wishes dear well i'm working in new one when i be free so maybe next week i'll post it
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Postby shakespear » Tue Sep 27, 2011 9:40 pm

hello
i hope to hear good news from u and i'm happy u work on new one....i feel so lazy to write one although inside me there is a poem wana go out but i imprisone it and not allow it to see the light...
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Postby sweets » Wed Sep 28, 2011 4:54 am

i'll tell u the same words you told me before
hold the pen .....the words come by itself

have a sweet day
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Postby Lara » Wed Sep 28, 2011 5:25 am

sweets wrote:what to say ..what to write .. what to tell.. what to do
my mind will explode oneday
my heart will bomb because of you
my tears must stop oneday
so be sure that i will stop loving you soooooooon
now it's your turn so can you tell me what to say ..what to write ..what to do ??????
i'm waiting for you


hi Sweets!! :) i really liked this poem, specially when u said "now it's your turn so can you tell me what to say ..what to write ..what to do ??????" Well my point of view is that she/he expresses all her/his feelings and thoughs to her/his love, but without having any answer or signal. Am i right? See You :)
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Re: for you ........

Postby sweets » Thu Sep 29, 2011 5:41 am

hello Lara
well she \he expresses all what she/he want form his/her beloved as a despress massage and i'm 75% sure that she/he won't have any answer .

he /she givesup waiting and giving chances for the other part but what you can say it's LOVE do u agree ith me ?????????
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Postby Lara » Thu Sep 29, 2011 7:04 pm

that's not love, that's obsession, because she/he knows he isn't gonna answer. Why is she/he still there waiting for her/him?...If she/he felt love, she/he would have answered, don't u think so?
Also a woman dont have to give many chances, because she can lose credibility, in case if it is a woman,
what u think? :-D
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