[Poem]Romance

[PeterNovotny]

If autumn has gone,I will waiting for you with the snow falling.
If the world has gone,I will standing in the paradise,praying.
If you have gone,I will cry you a river,in which I'm floating.
If I have gone,I will find someone fortunate to love you,darling.


It's quite a brief poem.My teacher ask me to translate this letters from Chinese poem into the english.The request is that it must be rhymed and correct without grammar mistakes.
It's my first works.Wish all of u enjoy this poem.

[Lara]

If autumn has gone,I will waiting for you with the snow falling.
If the world has gone,I will standing in the paradise,praying.
If you have gone,I will cry you a river,in which I'm floating.
If I have gone,I will find someone fortunate to love you,darling.

Hello PeterNovotny...welcome to EC, it's a nice poem, do u write poems in Chinese????
I really liked ur poem, see you friend!!

[PeterNovotny]

If autumn has gone,I will waiting for you with the snow falling.
If the world has gone,I will standing in the paradise,praying.
If you have gone,I will cry you a river,in which I'm floating.
If I have gone,I will find someone fortunate to love you,darling.

Hello PeterNovotny...welcome to EC, it's a nice poem, do u write poems in Chinese????
I really liked ur poem, see you friend!!

THX dude..I pretty wanna u to give me some advice about it ^^

[shakespear]

I will waiting

I will standing

I will find someone fortunate to love you

hi
here we have 3 items i think they r wrong
the 1st : grammatically is wrong
the 2nd: the same
the 3rd : its not grammatical wrong but i think its phraseology is not good, the style koz i think he wants to find lover for her to care for her to treat and nurse her...how he minds just for this thing...lover must be jealous on his sweetheart not cares to find one love her..
its my point of view
thnx

[PeterNovotny]

I will waiting

I will standing

I will find someone fortunate to love you

hi
here we have 3 items i think they r wrong
the 1st : grammatically is wrong
the 2nd: the same
the 3rd : its not grammatical wrong but i think its phraseology is not good, the style koz i think he wants to find lover for her to care for her to treat and nurse her...how he minds just for this thing...lover must be jealous on his sweetheart not cares to find one love her..
its my point of view
thnx

Uh..This poem might wanna express the grand love for this man towards that girl.So it's ok to find a lover to take care for his sweetheart instead of himself koz he just wanna her be weal till the end~:)