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Persian Rose In Italy

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Persian Rose In Italy

Postby shakespear » Sat Oct 22, 2011 5:10 am

Persian Rose In Italy


Rose Persian, I see in my dreams
Dwells in Italy, in that far place
So nice, so cute and always beams..
With beauty, hope, and moony face
I spent my life search and seek
I've just found and followed the trace
I won't stop even if I feel weak
Oh rose! You're my life, my last wish
You're my heaven, my high ideal peak
Don't leave me, it'll be my finish
****************************** 1
I love you , can't you get this fact?
"You waste our time" many times, I said
You always blame for my past act
And mourn our love as mourn the dead
Our love-days pass like dust in wind
You’re my roe, in my heart you bed
I loved you, pleased you, but you dinned..
"you don't love me, you love many"
You accused me, wronged me, you sinned
I'm yours and you're mine.. oh honey
****************************** 2
Take me with you, you took my heart
It beat inside me with your name
Now it's with you, we are apart
But you still lament and still blame
You can please me, you are so smart
I don’t deserve you, its a shame
You're truthful, so cute and so bright
But I'm liar, unclear with my dame
You're my eyes, hands, sweet dreams in night
Blame me if this will give me fame
****************************** 3
All I have said is for your sake
And your name's written by my blood
Trust me ! my poem is not a fake
Words flow from my chest like a flood
I saw your face, I became mad
You're still so fresh like a bloom bud
So don’t leave me, don’t make me sad
Your love erased all the past deeds
I know you are good and I'm bad
But you always grant my needs
****************************** 4
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy

Postby sweets » Sat Oct 22, 2011 6:23 am

hello or goodmorning

woooooow new poem in short time ,you are so g enerous for us (readers) thanx for that freind {-:

now let's come to ur poem as usual it's about theme of love of course with new symbol which is rose this time .By the way i do not agree with ur choice of this symbol (rose) because roses are so soft so weak live only for too short time then wilt . i agree that roses enjoy us since birth to die of it with view ..smell and touch but LOVE should be more srtong than rose it should be like (diamond)
bright ..soft ..strong and last forever


so when u like ur lover with a rose for me ur telling her: i love u but by the end u'll vanish how long i look for you ..how long i wait for you but at last u'll vanish and go and u support that idea with

You're my heaven, my high ideal peak

wht means of ur ideal peak if this peak is going to disappear this means that you spend your life searching for nothing.......................... :!!:

no grammatical mistakes of course ..strong touchable words ...maybe i become so hostile forgive me for that

thanx for entertaining us again ;-)
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy

Postby Elisa » Sat Oct 22, 2011 3:29 pm

Waw! You are a true Don Giovanni :lol: :lol:
You have lovers all around the world!!!!
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy

Postby Lara » Sat Oct 22, 2011 7:47 pm

shakespear wrote:All I have said is for your sake
And your name's written by my blood
Trust me ! my poem is not a fake
Words flow from my chest like a flood
I saw your face, I became mad
You're still so fresh like a bloom bud
So don’t leave me, don’t make me sad
Your love erased all the past deeds
I know you are good and I'm bad
But you always grant my needs


Hello Shakes, what a nice poem :) ....well in this poem you compare a woman with a flower/rose, especially when you talk about youth; although she may not be young, she can reflect youth, i think that's why you said "You're still so fresh like a bloom bud"

Wonderful Poem cu!!! :-D
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy

Postby shakespear » Sun Oct 23, 2011 5:19 am

hello sweets
you said that the rose or flower have short life and even is this happened but its symbol stays in our mind so if it vanish it'll be kept in our mind as beautiful...as nice perfume, scent....read this line
shakespear wrote:You're still so fresh like a bloom bud
i think u got the aim now
any way u made lovely analyses to my poem and i really thankful to u lovely comment...u r able to make lovely assays by analyses different topics

hello elisa
Elisa wrote:Waw! You are a true Don Giovanni

listen all persons in the world can be our personalities in our poems...they r symbols like flowers and roses and places and historical figures...so we can make use of all we can meet or read or see in our life..

hello lara
Lara wrote:she can reflect youth, i think that's why you said "You're still so fresh like a bloom bud"

i think u hit the target by ur comment and guess what i meant koz always flowers and roses reflect youth and beauty so u could hit the target and guess the intention behind the the lines...
thnx for ur comments and i have lots of speech i wana say but i hate to talk lots ...
i hope i can make another comments later
thnx again
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy

Postby Elisa » Sun Oct 23, 2011 3:37 pm

It is not important who you are...
you don't even know

Don't be presumptuous
how can you think to know what other people want, feel or look like?

Take what you need and let other doing the same!

We are ONE, NO ONE AND ONE HUNDRED THOUSAND
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/One,_No_on ... d_Thousand
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy

Postby sweets » Mon Oct 24, 2011 5:24 am

Elisa wrote:It is not important who you are...
you don't even know

Don't be presumptuous
how can you think to know what other people want, feel or look like?

Take what you need and let other doing the same!

We are ONE, NO ONE AND ONE HUNDRED THOUSAND
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/One,_No_on ... d_Thousand



nice quotaion Elisa but i do not think undersatand the purpose of putting it here as a reply for the poem ??????????????????
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy

Postby shakespear » Mon Oct 24, 2011 8:29 am

sweets wrote:nice quotaion Elisa but i do not think undersatand the purpose of putting it here as a reply for the poem ??????????????????


hi all
thnx alisa but really i agree with sweets in her reply
have nice day ...you all my friends
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy

Postby Elisa » Mon Oct 24, 2011 9:48 am

Thanks frieends :lol: :lol: :lol:
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Re: Persian Rose In Italy

Postby shakespear » Sat Oct 29, 2011 12:58 pm

hi elisa
wt u meant by ur quotation?
plz show us ur point of view...
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