BETWEEN ME & HER
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BETWEEN ME & HER
BETWEEN ME AND HER
I:
I always think I can leave
But I didn’t try it before
You're my candle, now I believe
Without you, my heart is sore
**********************
She:
I'm your candle, I burn my prime
Just to light your so dark way
But I know from the first time
I need you 'nd can't stay away
**********************
I:
Don’t hate me I can't bear it
I know your heart's often sad
For me, I think you're so fit
You're an angel, but I'm bad
**********************
She:
in my heart, you stabbed your knife
On my back, is still its bunch
I hate you but I'll hate life
And my heart bleeds so much
**********************
I:
I'm Punic, you're queen Didon
In my heart, you had a throne
And all things sweet you'd done
Don’t leave me in world alone
But you, I have got no one
In my life, the sun's shone
**********************
She:
I loved you but I was late
Its wrong, I'm not your queen
You enslaved me in last date
I love you and I've no bean
I'm sure you're my lovely fate
I try to hide but its seen
**********************
at last i could finish it...alhamdulilah that i finished it koz i was suffering ...have nice moments
I:
I always think I can leave
But I didn’t try it before
You're my candle, now I believe
Without you, my heart is sore
**********************
She:
I'm your candle, I burn my prime
Just to light your so dark way
But I know from the first time
I need you 'nd can't stay away
**********************
I:
Don’t hate me I can't bear it
I know your heart's often sad
For me, I think you're so fit
You're an angel, but I'm bad
**********************
She:
in my heart, you stabbed your knife
On my back, is still its bunch
I hate you but I'll hate life
And my heart bleeds so much
**********************
I:
I'm Punic, you're queen Didon
In my heart, you had a throne
And all things sweet you'd done
Don’t leave me in world alone
But you, I have got no one
In my life, the sun's shone
**********************
She:
I loved you but I was late
Its wrong, I'm not your queen
You enslaved me in last date
I love you and I've no bean
I'm sure you're my lovely fate
I try to hide but its seen
**********************
at last i could finish it...alhamdulilah that i finished it koz i was suffering ...have nice moments
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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER
dear friend
I'm so happy that you finished it you're better than me i did not finish till now .......
i like your conversation so much but i did not find the end is it endless story????????? tell me plz.
i'll send m poetic comment sooooon
takeare
I'm so happy that you finished it you're better than me i did not finish till now .......
i like your conversation so much but i did not find the end is it endless story????????? tell me plz.
i'll send m poetic comment sooooon
takeare
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hi friend
i couldn't add more koz i hoped to finish it in any way so its not short although its end not witty but it's ok...thnx 4 ur comment and i hope u finish ur poem soon...
regards
i couldn't add more koz i hoped to finish it in any way so its not short although its end not witty but it's ok...thnx 4 ur comment and i hope u finish ur poem soon...
regards
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honestly
i lose my talent ...... i feel so bad
i lose my talent ...... i feel so bad
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i don't think so u r like spring and it won't be dry and will still flow with clear water and u said this term b4 but u wrote many after that so don't be despaired koz all of us live in languor like urs but we passed it and u was one of us and u passed it b4 so hurry and hold ur pen and write whatever u get in ur mind.....i hope u can do it koz u r one of the motives, impulses in this club...sweets wrote:honestly
i lose my talent ...... i feel so bad
my best wishes...
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Hello Shakes, it's nice to see a different poem
Well we cant hide love we feel to the otherone, but it seems the time they met wasnt the right one, they love each other, but cant be together, it's my impression, am i right?
shakespear wrote:I loved you but I was late
Its wrong, I'm not your queen
You enslaved me in last date
I love you and I've no bean
I'm sure you're my lovely fate
I try to hide but its seen
Well we cant hide love we feel to the otherone, but it seems the time they met wasnt the right one, they love each other, but cant be together, it's my impression, am i right?
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shakespear wrote:She:
I'm your candle, I burn my prime
Just to light your so dark way
But I know from the first time
I need you 'nd can't stay away
i think she is more loyal than him ...she is ready to fall down for his sake although he loyal too but she is more...
and as u said
i think u r r8 and u r excellent in this comment...i like this impressionLara wrote:it seems the time they met wasnt the right one, they love each other, but cant be together
thnx and go ahead and let us hear sth from u...
regards
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Thanks Shakes
I hope so
I hope so
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u r welcome friend...
have nice time
have nice time
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shakespear wrote:i don't think so u r like spring and it won't be dry and will still flow with clear water and u said this term b4 but u wrote many after that so don't be despaired koz all of us live in languor like urs but we passed it and u was one of us and u passed it b4 so hurry and hold ur pen and write whatever u get in ur mind.....i hope u can do it koz u r one of the motives, impulses in this club...sweets wrote:honestly
i lose my talent ...... i feel so bad
my best wishes...
thanx for cheering up friend but when heart is lost ..when mind is busy..when soul is missed when you feel that time is running and you can not catch it how can i hold my pen again ??!!!!
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaw this term is intrinsically, in its self considerd as lovely poem...u r kidding when u say u have lost ability to write poetry koz the term u wrote is a great evidence that u can write a poem easily...i wish i said this term or i thought in this term ..and i'll make it lovely poem...u have to try this term and decorate it to create from it lovely poem...i wish i have ur ability to imagine things in lovely sights like u...u r the best if u try hard and try ur best...u can make things from nothing...think of my speech and u'll find ur way to write and create..sweets wrote:thanx for cheering up friend but when heart is lost ..when mind is busy..when soul is missed when you feel that time is running and you can not catch it how can i hold my pen again ??!!!!
best wishes friend
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shakespear wrote:waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaw this term is intrinsically, in its self considerd as lovely poem...u r kidding when u say u have lost ability to write poetry koz the term u wrote is a great evidence that u can write a poem easily...i wish i said this term or i thought in this term ..and i'll make it lovely poem...u have to try this term and decorate it to create from it lovely poem...i wish i have ur ability to imagine things in lovely sights like u...u r the best if u try hard and try ur best...u can make things from nothing...think of my speech and u'll find ur way to write and create..sweets wrote:thanx for cheering up friend but when heart is lost ..when mind is busy..when soul is missed when you feel that time is running and you can not catch it how can i hold my pen again ??!!!!
best wishes friend
so ur insisting on to write and create maybe i should try let me see ..think and create newthing
thanx for supporting friend
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yeah i think the 1st step to write ...if u have time and wish to write so u can do it...koz if u don't have desire to that u can't write a letter and i wana u think and try...sweets wrote:so ur insisting on to write and create maybe i should try let me see
i'll be waiting for u ...
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what's really killing me that nothing deserve to write about ...everything around me is big illusion people are turning to machines ..kids without any innocence..every thing is depending on (give & take) so if you have nothing to give you can not touch anything ...........so come on wat shall i write about ..about fake love or imaginative perfect world .....lost paradise or how people are living in peace and happiness !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
just tell me koz i'm lossing my mind
just tell me koz i'm lossing my mind
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doesn't sun shin in ur country...can't u see it every day...is there a moon in the sky during nights..stars...butterfly...do u still have imagination about innocence and kind, merciful mothers and fathers...can't u imagine severe love and soft one...can't u write about violence towards ppl all over the world....
i think there r lots of images and u can catch some of them and paint a lovely picture
regards
i think there r lots of images and u can catch some of them and paint a lovely picture
regards
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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER
NEW POEM I DID NOT READ IT BEFORE
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enjoy reading it plz...farah wrote:NEW POEM I DID NOT READ IT BEFORE
have nice moments
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sweets wrote:what's really killing me that nothing deserve to write about ...everything around me is big illusion people are turning to machines ..kids without any innocence..every thing is depending on (give & take) so if you have nothing to give you can not touch anything ...........so come on wat shall i write about ..about fake love or imaginative perfect world .....lost paradise or how people are living in peace and happiness !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
just tell me koz i'm lossing my mind
so did u think about my view...about my speech...many things in this world deserve to write about....dont they???shakespear wrote:doesn't sun shin in ur country...can't u see it every day...is there a moon in the sky during nights..stars...butterfly...do u still have imagination about innocence and kind, merciful mothers and fathers...can't u imagine severe love and soft one...can't u write about violence towards ppl all over the world....
i think there r lots of images and u can catch some of them and paint a lovely picture
regards
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BETWEEN ME AND HER
I:
I always think I can leave
But I didn’t try it before
You're my candle, now I believe
Without you, my heart is sore
**********************
She:
I'm your candle, I burn my prime
Just to light your so dark way
But I know from the first time
I need you 'nd can't stay away
**********************
I:
Don’t hate me I can't bear it
I know your heart's often sad
For me, I think you're so fit
You're an angel, but I'm bad
**********************
She:
in my heart, you stabbed your knife
On my back, is still its bunch
I hate you but I'll hate life
And my heart bleeds so much
**********************
I:
I'm Punic, you're queen Didon
In my heart, you had a throne
And all things sweet you'd done
Don’t leave me in world alone
But you, I have got no one
In my life, the sun's shone
**********************
She:
I loved you but I was late
Its wrong, I'm not your queen
You enslaved me in last date
I love you and I've no bean
I'm sure you're my lovely fate
I try to hide but its seen
i wrote it as a dialogue between me and her....so every one has his own explanation....
I:
I always think I can leave
But I didn’t try it before
You're my candle, now I believe
Without you, my heart is sore
**********************
She:
I'm your candle, I burn my prime
Just to light your so dark way
But I know from the first time
I need you 'nd can't stay away
**********************
I:
Don’t hate me I can't bear it
I know your heart's often sad
For me, I think you're so fit
You're an angel, but I'm bad
**********************
She:
in my heart, you stabbed your knife
On my back, is still its bunch
I hate you but I'll hate life
And my heart bleeds so much
**********************
I:
I'm Punic, you're queen Didon
In my heart, you had a throne
And all things sweet you'd done
Don’t leave me in world alone
But you, I have got no one
In my life, the sun's shone
**********************
She:
I loved you but I was late
Its wrong, I'm not your queen
You enslaved me in last date
I love you and I've no bean
I'm sure you're my lovely fate
I try to hide but its seen
i wrote it as a dialogue between me and her....so every one has his own explanation....
our life is like a night mare
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Re: BETWEEN ME & HER
"I loved you but I was late"
i guess she is still thinking it's too late
i guess she is still thinking it's too late
be urself
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hi...
there's still glimpse of hope that u come here and send a comment...i'm happy...
listen i remembered a poem from u or may be its an idea from u about that woman who is waiting in a railway station...waiting her lover but in vain...
u promised to try writing a poem...and till now we see nothing...
i hope u r trying now...
have nice moments
there's still glimpse of hope that u come here and send a comment...i'm happy...
listen i remembered a poem from u or may be its an idea from u about that woman who is waiting in a railway station...waiting her lover but in vain...
u promised to try writing a poem...and till now we see nothing...
i hope u r trying now...
have nice moments
our life is like a night mare
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between u and me words are not nothing just let our eyes talk
between u and me many feelings are on crash
anger ..happy ...mad or in love
between u and me .........let's live our dream
between u and me many feelings are on crash
anger ..happy ...mad or in love
between u and me .........let's live our dream
be urself
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hi at last i can open my account after long time of trying to enter ...any way i'm sorry 4 my delay and now i want to issue a new poem and hope that all my friends here can show me my mistakes so i apologize in advance about any mistake
see u soon
see u soon
our life is like a night mare
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