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Weak Heart

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Weak Heart

Postby Lara » Tue Nov 01, 2011 4:29 am

Weak Heart

Every time you love someone I cry
You love again and again and they hurt you
Every day you remind me, tell me why
Stop loving him, I did it and hope you too

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If my mind refuses him, you cry for him
You scare me, you make me doubt
Don’t love, it’s better for us; it’s your whim
Heart, you filled my mind of drought

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Love is a bitter taste I don’t want to relish
Heart; you see! You are my downfall
You made me lose my senses, don’t be selfish
If I love again, it’s your blame, I’m not a doll

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Im sorry if i have grammar mistakes :-D
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Re: Weak Heart

Postby shakespear » Thu Nov 03, 2011 10:04 pm

Lara wrote:Love is a bitter taste I don’t want to relish
Heart; you see! You are my downfall


at last i found sth good, it's lovely poem and i think it expresses sth hidden...it's like a struggle between mind and heart....heart desires but mind advises and not carries away with this desire....
really it's good poem and its idea is new as i think
have nice moments....
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Re: Weak Heart

Postby Lara » Fri Nov 04, 2011 2:26 am

shakespear wrote:it's like a struggle between mind and heart....heart desires but mind advises and not carries away with this desire....


HI Shakes
Right, mind and heart don't agree, it's hard to understand those feelings, and i think this happens in real life. thanks for ur comment c u :-)
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Re: Weak Heart

Postby shakespear » Fri Nov 04, 2011 10:36 pm

hi
congratulations
u wrote lovely poem with rhyme and u r always welcome
thnx
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Re: Weak Heart

Postby Lara » Sat Nov 05, 2011 2:16 am

Thanks :-D shakes, u r a nice friend :)
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Re: Weak Heart

Postby shakespear » Sat Nov 05, 2011 2:21 am

u too
and all my friends here in this club r so nice ....so i hope lovely days and moments to all my friends
my friend lara no need to thank me koz u deserve praise on this perfect piece of poetry....
any way u r welcome in anytime...
good luck
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Re: Weak Heart

Postby Lara » Sat Nov 05, 2011 2:29 am

have nice moments u too c u :-D
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Re: Weak Heart

Postby shakespear » Sun Dec 18, 2011 9:18 am

hi friend
plz enrich us with new poem of ur lovely poems
we're waiting 4 u to do that
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Re: Weak Heart

Postby Lara » Mon Dec 19, 2011 3:16 am

Hello Shakes, thanks so much, im trying to start a new one :roll: then, maybe i show it to you all next year, i ask God for inspiration, and i hope so soon
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Re: Weak Heart

Postby shakespear » Tue Jan 31, 2012 4:18 am

hi...we entered the new year but nothing till now....be aware we r all waiting ur new poem or may be u ddn't get the inspiration till now???
have nice year to u and to all my friends in this club
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