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nandana
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Mind can sometimes overpower your heart. Even if your heart wishes to do something or has feelings for someone or something, your mind wishes otherwise. If you look closely into the interaction between your thoughts, emotions, conscience and beliefs, it can be seen very clearly that your decisions are mostly influenced by people that matters to you. Some decisions are taken just because you want to be in someone’s good book, some because you don’t want to hurt someone. And certain major ones are so because the society demands so. At times you may wonder where is the personal freedom?. But how long can you keep the feelings, emotions and your wishes buried deep inside your heart. How long can you fool yourself and make yourself believe that everything happens for a reason? Whenever you are alone or get some time to contemplate on your life, things that you have in your heart creeps into your mind and you will find yourself engulfed in a sea of grief.
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The mind can sometimes overpower the heart. Even if you desire something, or have feelings for someone, your mind can occasionally think differently. If you look closely at the interaction between your thoughts, emotions, conscience, and beliefs, it can clearly be seen that your decisions are mostly influenced by people that matter to you. Some decisions are made because you want to be in good standing with someone, and others because you don't want to hurt any feelings. Some major decisions are made because society demands them to be made. At times you may wonder, "where is the personal freedom?". One has to ask, how long can you keep your feelings, emotions, and wishes buried deep inside your heart? How long can you fool yourself, and make yourself believe that everything happens for a reason? Whenever you are alone or have the time to think about your life, your heart's desires creep into your mind, and you find yourself engulfed in a sea of grief.
nandana
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Thank you for the reply. :)

I appreciate the time you took to read what i wrote.

Have a blessed day.
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