A ROSE & A HELL
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
hello shakespear...i want to thank you very much because you review my lines and finally i could issue these lines....thank you because you did me this favor..my lines:
you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...
i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..
you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...
i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
Hi farah.... U r welcome
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poemshakespear wrote:Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
THANKS LOTS SHAKESPEAR
SEE YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOON
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ok listen farah...we start days b4 a game to start with a word or a line which determine the topic and we begin to compose about it...and u can review the comments i with dreamer...i think u r online now...so y don't u start with :farah wrote:really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem
do i only feel sad ?
have nice moments...
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mmm ok so you want me to start with this line, right???shakespear wrote:do i only feel sad ?
ok let me start:
Do I only feel sad?
Or all the world with me?
Are you also sad?
If not, you are bad.
hahahah... so what do you think about this poem??
I think it's so lovely game
I'm waiting your comment............
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
Sorry net was cut... Really i think u start writing lines ...u can complete it with many lines but be careful with grammar& dictation& meaning
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Wt u wana me start with? Choose any thing.. U know my ability.. Ok?
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Ok.... But really if u try a poem it'll be better... Ok :
Will you really go far away?
Will you really go far away?
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No words to say
No games to play
No lyrics to sing
To fly, you need a wing
.......
I asked u to write long poem... I'm sure u can do it easily BUT may be u r a bit lazy & that's all
No games to play
No lyrics to sing
To fly, you need a wing
.......
I asked u to write long poem... I'm sure u can do it easily BUT may be u r a bit lazy & that's all
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
no words to say
no games to play
no lyrics to sing
to fly you need a wing
to love you need passion
to live you need to dream
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play
what do you think about
no games to play
no lyrics to sing
to fly you need a wing
to love you need passion
to live you need to dream
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play
what do you think about
be urself
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
Hello
How did you say first no game then you said there is a game ... In the last line?
It's my idea
How did you say first no game then you said there is a game ... In the last line?
It's my idea
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
hi farah:dreamer wrote:no words to say
no games to play
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play
did u mean these 2 lines?? ok may be u r r8 but the poet can do what others can't..this called in literature" poetic license" ...any way it's ur opinioin
but my opinion is: we have to write and write whatever comes to our mind...we have to translate our ideas to lines of poems...and show the other what we want to say in poetic writing...
dear friend dreamer:
i think u r able to write wtever u want...u can make all ur speech poetry... really i think u r the best in this club....koz u have soft sense
finally: thanks farah to show ur comment frankly
........... thanks dreamer to accept all opinion and comments
.......... thanks all my friends in this club to edure my long comments
all have nice moments.........warm kisses
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Waw.. How can this happen? If you agree I am not agree. But thank you to teach us the term(poetic licens) SHKIE... Have sweet dream my s......... FRIEND
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
well it's not a matter to agree or not it's just we post what's going in ur mind at this moment
u might see some
antinomy in my lines it's just i post directly according to my mood that all farah
cu around and waiting to share us in our game
u might see some
antinomy in my lines it's just i post directly according to my mood that all farah
cu around and waiting to share us in our game
be urself
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Hi farsh.. We all respect ur opinion but in return we wish others respect our opinions,
u r thanked 2show our wrongs 2b corrected in future.. Have nice day
u r thanked 2show our wrongs 2b corrected in future.. Have nice day
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Hi shakie... Thank you... I respect your opinion...bye my lovely friends
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Hi farah.. Thnx
plz dont send me seducing words like" lovely or sweet etc" anyway thnxxxx
do u hv bf?
Im waitinv ur reply...
plz dont send me seducing words like" lovely or sweet etc" anyway thnxxxx
do u hv bf?
Im waitinv ur reply...
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
it's not hard to find one but the hard is to search well and ur too lazy to do that search
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
as u like but i like to hear and read from u new poem
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
what line u like in this poem????shakespear wrote:A ROSE & A HELL
Who listens to infants or cares for plants?
Who defends them, defends their sad mothers?
Who feels for them, feels for the tearful chants?
All denied, you have no friends, no brothers
………………………………………………………………………. (1)
Who will say " HAPPY RETURNS" again?
Who will give us cards and sweets at Bairam?
Who will wipe puzzled tears, and erase sore pain?
We all please the hope, cling to a fine tram
………………………………………………………………………. (2)
Clashes and shelling, are all day and night
Scattered limbs are spread so high in the sky
The mothers are still waiting for the knight
The saver will come and erase the sigh
………………………………………………………………………. (3)
Moving from place to place, I try to escape
During the night's silence, dull hours pass
And other foul bombs break the calm, and rape..
Our quiet, our souls, and kill the so fair lass
………………………………………………………………………. (4)
A grisly tyrant became our bad fate
Allied with Satan to kill more and more
He's thirsty to blood and he wants to sate
Who stops him? our happy life turned sore
………………………………………………………………………. (5)
An awful missile fell on my garden
Ruined my white flowers, destroyed the beauty
Broke the green branches, it aims to sadden
Happy beings, really you're so potty
………………………………………………………………………. (6)
Under the debris, I found a soft rose
It was still dewy, It was still alive
My lass, I need you to revive and dose..
The rose, what a pity! the charm will rive
………………………………………………………………………. (7)
When can I lean my head on your cozy chest?
Close my eyes, dream to chase you on green lawn?
Recite to you my touching poem, my geste?
And open them to look at you, my nice fawn?
………………………………………………………………………. (8)
i hope you enjoy reading my new poem
have nice moments
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL
i supposed that....read it again and show me my mistakes please
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