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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby [amal] » Mon Oct 01, 2012 2:40 pm

Hi Mortaza,

How are you and how are your wife and children?

Welcome to this thread! It's nice to rejoin an old member to Let's learn together. I hope all the members regather here again and rebuild that warm atmosphere.. How great that would be!!! :-D

Unfortunately, I wasn't lucky enough to be with you in the first Let's learn together. However, I saw all what happened and how and who caused to close it. That was a big loss for all of us obviously. :(

Dear, you may don't know me so let me introduce myself to you. I am Amal, female. 23 years old from Damascus-Syria.

I read all your posts here and I knew that your daughter is going to the kindergarten. I hope she enjoy her time there. However, I think that she is still too young for that. In fact, I think that the best age for sending kids to the kindergarten is 5 years old cause they become able to leave their mothers and make new relationship with others. On the other hand, kids at this age catch a lot of diseases easily so it's better to keep them save in home...

For me, I love 3 or 4 years kids so if I was a mother, I would like to spend and not waste every minute with my children cause at this age they become very funny, lovely and naughty. :-D

Anyway, wish you a happy life.

Take care,
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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby Elham » Mon Oct 01, 2012 3:27 pm

Hi dear Oriani,

I'm writing this post just to let you know I really really really enjoyed reading your last post. I enjoyed your English and reading each line encourged me to continue through the next lines. :-)
After having a stressful busy day, it was such a nice rest to read your post, I don't know why!!! :-D

How can some one become a Miss Englishclub?!!! I'd love to too! {-;

I'm very intrested in your writings. Hope to hear more and more from you.

All the best,
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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby behnam » Mon Oct 01, 2012 4:05 pm

Hi to all people who visit this thread,

Thank you very much for following this thread; reading or writing. Your visit supports and encourages us to continue writing on this site.

As you may know, a nice person has conducted an opinion poll; asking people idea about introducing someone who is good at chatting. This is the link:

http://my.englishclub.com/forum/topics/ ... t-chatting

Please kindly visit that link and vote. Thank you very much for participating in polling.

All the best,
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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby Oriani » Mon Oct 01, 2012 6:28 pm

behnam wrote:Hi to all people who visit this thread,

Thank you very much for following this thread; reading or writing. Your visit supports and encourages us to continue writing on this site.

As you may know, a nice person has conducted an opinion poll; asking people idea about introducing someone who is good at chatting. This is the link:

http://my.englishclub.com/forum/topics/ ... t-chatting

Please kindly visit that link and vote. Thank you very much for participating in polling.

All the best,
Behnam, 1 October, 2012
I know. I'm also on MyEC pages. I've got my profile there, too.



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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby mortaza » Mon Oct 01, 2012 7:49 pm

Dear Amal,

Thank you very much for your kind and friendly post to me! Of course, I do remember you from last time I was a member of "Let's learn together" community! In fact, I know that we have written to each other for some times.

Dear Amal! You are from Syria. These days we hear a lot from your country! What happen in Syria are the headlines for almost all news session in media. We are very sad ans upset of what happens to the people of Syria. I hope peace and harmony come back to Syria very soon. If you don't mind, please write about the situation in your country. You know, we cannot trust the media completely.

Today, for the third time, my wife, Maryam, took our daughter, Negar, to the kindergarten. She says that today Negar was more comfortable and she was more interested in exploring the environment of the kindergarten. She [Negar] spent more time playing with toys and communicating with other children. So, it is more likely that we will register her in the kindergarten.

Thank you for reading. I am looking forward to hear from you soon.

All the best,

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My writing for an English Class

Postby mortaza » Tue Oct 02, 2012 2:37 pm

Dear all,

This semester, my wife and I both registered in an English writing class. We are now classmates! One reason that I registered in the class, beside learning English, is that I want to spend more time with my wife doing useful activities. Here is my first writing that I am going to present to the teacher as my homework:


Topic: It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance, for sports or music, and other are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be toughed to become a good sportpesron or musician.

In my opinion, the whole idea in previous paragraph is correct. It is apparent that people have different abilities and talents. It may very well happen that two children in the same family have significant differences. Even for new born babies, these differences are noticeable. The interests differs from one person to another. It causes that each person pursues his/her own way in life and tries to reach his/her own goals.

For example, I, as an individual, love swimming while I don't like football. On the other hand, my friend is in love with football but he does not like swimming very much. The result is that I am a good swimmer now but cannot play football, and he plays football like professionals but he is not able to swim.

But, because you are not being talented to do something or you are not interested in doing an activity does not mean that you will not be able to do it. I think, to becom master in doing some activity, it is just needed practice, hard working and being patient. For example, we all saw many people with various disabilities that are successful in their life. Recently, in Olympics games, I saw a photo of an athletic with no hands and no legs that was competing in swimming!

Being successful does not depend completely in god given talents. What is common among all people is the ability to work hard and practice. So, considering all these factors, I think that all people have equal opportunity in their life to be evolved and flourished.


Thanks for reading.

All the best,

Mortaza
October 2, 2012

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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby [amal] » Tue Oct 02, 2012 9:47 pm

Hi Mortaza,

How are you?

Thanks dear for your reply and thank for your wishes for Syrians, I really appreciate it!

When I was a kid,I was always wounder why my country wasn't known on the TV channels, why no one name it in programs, Tv shows and even in news. I wondered even if the world really knows where Syria located on the map.. This wonders really made me disappointed.

However, now, all the world not only the TV channels knows us and speaks about us but I am not Satisfied!!! I really wish we still unknown and the life back as the past when we were happy, safe and love each other...

Dear, I don't know what to tell you about the situation here.. But I can tell you that our enemies are watching us happily, they want us to fight each other under the name of freedom and forget them. They keep trying to support the insurgents and give them weapons to kill as many innocent people as it's possible. I don't know how much time this will last but I hope it ends very very soon.

In the end, I am really happy to hear that you registered in an English writing class, good for you and your wife, she must be a lucky wife to have you beside her!
Your paragraph is really good, I enjoyed reading it, please keep sharing us whatever you write there. That would be very useful for us too.

Good luck.
Amal

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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby [amal] » Tue Oct 02, 2012 11:11 pm

Hi Oriani,

How are you?

Yesterday I visited your page in this site and saw your videos.. Wow dear, you have a nice voice! I didn't know that you are good in singing!!!

How did you learn to sing in this way? Do you take any classes?! And what kind of music do you prefer?

I prefer classical music and my favorite singer is Amr Diab, he is an Arab famous star, do you know him?

Have a nice day,

Amal

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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby Oriani » Wed Oct 03, 2012 12:59 am

[amal] wrote:Hi Oriani,

How are you?

Yesterday I visited your page in this site and saw your videos.. Wow dear, you have a nice voice! I didn't know that you are good in singing!!!

How did you learn to sing in this way? Do you take any classes?! And what kind of music do you prefer?

I prefer classical music and my favorite singer is Amr Diab, he is an Arab famous star, do you know him?

Have a nice day,

Amal


Hi there.
Thanks for visiting my page.
Yes, that's me signing. I started singing when I was a little girl. Actually, I began to sing and participate at singing events and I used to get a lot of prices. On the other hand, I am a Violinist, so I do love classical music.

Oh, sorry. I am afraid I do not know who Amr Diab is.
Greetings.

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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby Mohsen » Thu Oct 04, 2012 4:11 am

Hi Mortaza,

I hope you are fine and doing well. Mortaza my vocabulary is not enough rich because I can’t use many words in speaking . When I read an English text, I understand the meaning of many words ,and at the same time I am able use it in my writing, but I forget these words when I close the text ,or one day later. For example I read the word of plummet in a text today ,it means , something falls very quickly, the text was about the rate of currency which decreased quickly, it is a new word for me and It is evident that English language is not used in my everyday communication and I should not be expected to use different English words in my speaking and chatting, especially the less frequent used words.
Writing in Forums help us to make our English knowledge active and keep in mind what we have learned till now. It is a good way to use difficult and new words, difficult words.
I like biking, and I use bicycle for my routine transportation in the city. My critic to Isfahan mayor is that why he doesn’t order for prohibition of car traffic in central streets ,at least for few days per week. It the best means for people transportation.

You can use it in university , don’t mind what student say. You can start using it one day in a week ,as you and your students get use to it ,increase it.

Best Wishes,
Mohsen

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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby Mohsen » Fri Oct 05, 2012 5:40 am

Hi Mortaza,

How are you, These days I fall to sleep more than before ,it is the influence of season and cool weather , I read my last post to you, I couldn’t understand it , When I was writing my last post , I was drowsy, sorry, I decided to correct it


I hope you are fine and doing well. Mortaza my vocabulary is not enough rich to use many words in speaking . When I read an English text, I understand the meaning of many words , at the same time I am able to use it in my writing, but I forget these words when I close the text ,or one day later. For example I read the word of plummet in a text today ,it means , something falls very quickly, the text was about the rate of currency which decreased quickly, it is a new word for me and It is evident that I should not be expected to use different English words in my speaking because English language is not used in my everyday communication and chatting, especially the less frequent used words.

Writing in Forums help us to make our English knowledge active and keep in mind what we have learned till now. It is a good way to use difficult and new words.

I like biking, and I use bicycle for my routine transportation in the city. My critic to Isfahan mayor is that why he doesn’t order for prohibition of car traffic in central streets ,at least for few days per week. It the best means for people transportation.

You can use bicycle in university, don’t mind what student say. You can start using it one day in a week , when your students get use to it ,use It everyday.

Best Wishes,
Mohsen

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10 Principles for Peace of Mind

Postby behnam » Sat Oct 06, 2012 1:37 pm

(Part One)

1. Do Not Interfere In Others’ Business Unless Asked:

Most of us create our own problems by interfering too often in others’ affairs. We do so because somehow we have convinced ourselves that our way is the best way, our logic is the perfect logic and those who do not conform to our thinking must be criticized and steered to the right direction, our direction. This thinking denies the existence of individuality and consequently the existence of God.. God has created each one of us in a unique way. No two human beings can think or act inexactly the same way. All men or women act the way they do because God within them prompts them that way. Mind your own business and you will keep your peace.

2. Forgive And Forget:

This is the most powerful aid to peace of mind. We often develop ill feelings inside our heart for the person who insults us or harms us. We nurture grievances. This in turn results in loss of sleep, development of stomach ulcers, and high blood pressure. This insult or injury was done once, but nourishing of grievance goes on forever by constantly remembering it. Get over this bad habit. Life is too short to waste in such trifles. Forgive & Forget, and march on. Love flourishes in giving and forgiving.

3. Do Not Crave For Recognition:

This world is full of selfish people. They seldom praise anybody without selfish motives. They may praise you today because you are in power, but no sooner than you are powerless, they will forget your achievement and will start finding faults in you. Why do you wish to kill yours if in striving for their recognition? Their recognition is not worth the aggravation. Do your duties ethically and sincerely.

4. Do Not Be Jealous:

We all have experienced how jealousy can disturb our peace of mind. You know that you work harder than your colleagues in the office, but sometimes they get promotions; you do not. You started a business several years ago, but you are not as successful as your neighbor whose business is only one year old. There are several examples like these in everyday life. Should you be jealous? No. Remember everybody’s life is shaped by his/her destiny, which has now become his/her reality. If you are destined to be rich, nothing in the world can stop you. If you are not so destined, no one can help you either. Nothing will be gained by blaming others for your misfortune. Jealousy will not get you anywhere; it will only take away your peace of mind.

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All the best,
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10 Principles for Peace of Mind

Postby behnam » Sat Oct 06, 2012 1:39 pm

(Part Two)

5. Change Yourself According To The Environment:

If you try to change the environment single-handedly, the chances are you will fail. Instead, change yourself to suit your environment. As you do this, even the environment, which has been unfriendly to you, will mysteriously change and seem congenial and harmonious.

6. Endure What Cannot Be Cured:

This is the best way to turn a disadvantage into an advantage. Every day we face numerous inconveniences, ailments, irritations, and accidents that are beyond our control. If we cannot control them or change them, we must learn to put up with these things. We must learn to endure them cheerfully. Believe in yourself and you will gain in terms of patience, inner strength and will power.

7. Do Not Bite Off More Than You Can Chew:

This maxim needs to be remembered constantly. We often tend to take more responsibilities than we are capable of carrying out. This is done to satisfy our ego. Know your limitations. . Why take on additional loads that may create more worries? You cannot gain peace of mind by expanding your external activities. Reduce your material engagements and spend time in prayer, introspection and meditation. This will reduce those thoughts in your mind that make you restless. Uncluttered mind will produce greater peace of mind.

8. Meditate Regularly:

Meditation calms the mind and gets rid of disturbing thoughts. This is the highest state of peace of mind. Try and experience it yourself. If you meditate earnestly for half an hour every day, your mind will tend to become peaceful during the remaining twenty-three and half-hours. Your mind will not be easily disturbed as it was before. You would benefit by gradually increasing the period of daily meditation. You may think that this will interfere with your daily work. On the contrary, this will increase your efficiency and you will be able to produce better results in less time.

9. Never Leave The Mind Vacant:

An empty mind is the devil’s workshop. All evil actions start in the vacant mind. Keep your mind occupied in something positive, something worthwhile. Actively follow a hobby. Do something that holds your interest. You must decide what you value more: money or peace of mind. Your hobby, like social work or religious work, may not always earn you more money, but you will have a sense of fulfillment and achievement. Even when you are resting physically, occupy yourself in healthy reading or chanting of God’s name.

10. Do Not Procrastinate And Never Regret:

Do not waste time in protracted wondering "Should I or shouldn't I?" Days, weeks, months, and years may be wasted in that futile mental debating. You can never plan enough because you can never anticipate all future happenings. Value your time and do the things that need to be done. It does not matter if you fail the first time. You can learn from your mistakes and succeed the next time. Sitting back and worrying will lead to nothing. Learn from your mistakes, but do not brood over the past. DO NOT REGRET. Whatever happened was destined to happen only that way. Why cry over split milk?

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Thank you for reading.

All the best,
Behnam, 6 October, 2012


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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby Elham » Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:09 pm

Dear Oriani,

I'm afraid you havn't noticed my post to you and my question!

Would you please let me know how can one become a Miss Englishclub?

I'm waiting for your reply.

All the best,
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Postby Oriani » Sun Oct 07, 2012 6:46 pm

Elham wrote:Dear Oriani,

I'm afraid you havn't noticed my post to you and my question!

Would you please let me know how can one become a Miss Englishclub?

I'm waiting for your reply.

All the best,
Elham


Oh dear, sorry.
Yes. I can tell you. The point is that I became MissEC for fun and that happened 5 years ago with different people and we used to have a different environment here on EC. That does not exist anymore, dear.
Sorry.

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My essay for my English class

Postby mortaza » Mon Oct 08, 2012 4:26 am

Dear all,

As I said before, my wife and I are attending an English writing class together. The teacher wanted us to write about advantageous and disadvantageous of mixed and separated schools. I would like to share my writing with you here.


Advantageous and Disadvantageous of Separated and Mixed Schools.

There are certainly societies in which the schools are separated, and there exist, of course, a lot of countries that boys and girls attend mixed schools. How would students take benefit form mixed schools? What kind of abilities and talents are there that would not be activated in the presence of the opposite sex?

Human beings have social life in nature. To have a happy life, every individual (male or female) needs to communicate and interact with other people. This, in turn, involves that he/she knows actually how to behave among others especially with the opposite sex; after all, half of the society consists of people with opposite sex. Now, when and where a person should learn how to work and cooperate with others? With no doubt, school plays a crucial role. If the schools are separated, from the beginning level to the top level, then the students missed the opportunity to learn about the opposite sex and it may causes a lot of issues! For example, in Iran schools are separated. When a student finishes his/her school and enters a university, he/she suddenly faces a totally different environment. The presence of the opposite sex makes many students to fail to act normally in the class and to present themselves as they expect to.

On the other hand, students are in their teenage period while going to high school. Teenagers are very vulnerable and sensitive. They pay attention too much to the opposite sex. They may, even, fall in love with their classmates if they are in a mixed school. So, in the case of mixed schools, parents and teachers must be very careful. They should help the students to avoid such harmful situations.

In conclusion, I think, if parents and teachers, and consequently children, are educated and cultured enough so that they can handle and manage the relationship between boys and girls in a healthy way, then it is much better for students to attend mixed schools and learn how to work and cooperate with each other. I strongly believe that, in mixed schools, student can learn also how to be good parents in their future life.


All the best

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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby Mohsen » Mon Oct 08, 2012 2:16 pm

Dear Behnam,

I was thinking to find an answer for a question which was made in my mind that why in English we have two names for a season, Fall and Autumn and why there is no name for other seasons and finally I came up with the result that when the summer finishes the activities of people will be finished either, I mean the farmers who live in old times , so there is nothing to do and It was a time to be fallen in love and pass the cold winter in a warm beds :-D . So they called this season fall. I didn't find any other reason for it , what is your idea?

About your last post ,I read it twice and what I got from the writer's idea is that in general his/her thought derives from the idea which say if someone slaps me in one side my face , I have no reaction ,but say thank you and ask him to slap me in another side of my face.

I saw an old man was sleeping in bus station yesterday, I went toward him to see if he is dead or alive , I shook him by my hand ,he opened his eye. I said " do you want to call for ambulance ?" his answer was not positive, He told me that he was tired and needed to rest for some minutes.

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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby Mohsen » Tue Oct 09, 2012 4:44 am

Dear Mortaza,

Thank you for sharing you writing for us. You have written it without mistakes, just in the first line change the certainly to certain, this is my point.

I have my idea about school system, If we want to assess a system , we should see what is the output and the result. Considering the output of science and education in separated schools like Iran , we see the high ranking of Iran students in different science Olympic competitions.
Considering the social behaviours in co-educational schools and separated schools ,we should study the societies . What has happen for the core of families in societies? What is the reason of homosexuality growth in some societies? In some countries many couple live together for years without official marriage, even they may have child and then they will be separated ,What is the effect of having so many orphans in future of a country.
As you see if we change a basic system in a society , we deal with many other problems in future.

B.Wishes,
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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby mortaza » Tue Oct 09, 2012 6:00 pm

Dear Mohsen and Amal,

How are you my friends? How it is going? I hope everything is OK.

Today, I would like to write to you about a special topic that I found it in one of your previous writings commonly. Before saying what I am going to write about, let me quote a few sentence from your writings:
    Mohsen wrote in his writing:
    …What I get from the news ,particularly the trick news of BBC last night is that our enemies has started an economical war, Iran is being forced to submit to their illegal orders…

    Amal wrote in her writing:
    … But I can tell you that our enemies are watching us happily, they want us to fight each other under the name of freedom and forget them…

As you may agree with me, these two quotations read about the same thing. Iran and Syria are threatened by some enemies from outside. First of all, I should emphasize that I do not want to start a political discussion, and I hope this would be clear from my writing when you finish reading it.

We are living in the kind of countries that are well-known as developing countries. Almost all developing countries are struggling with variety of problems most of which concerns with economy and politics. Iran and Syria have some problems in common and, of course, some problems of their own.

To solve the problems, we need to find the source of the problems; we must know what causes these problems. As far as I see, the media in Iran try to track the cause of our problems outside the country, and I can guess that the same thing is happening in Syria. Am I right Amal?

Sure! there are many problems that have been created by foreigners! But, I believe that hands from outside can cause trouble to us only if they find inside conditions suitable for interference. Therefore, we must be very careful of what we do to ourselves and how treat each other. A wise nation can hardly be manipulated by its enemies.

Let me here tell you a story of our prophet that I am sure you know about it already. I hope I am able to convey the moral of the story;

    One day, our prophet saw a group of his warriors coming back from a battle. He told them that they were just coming back from the "least war," and they were about to face the "great war." "What is the great war?", they asked. And he replied that the great war for each person is the war against his/her inside enemy.

Dear friends! I thing the inside enemy is being ignorant, selfish, dishonest, not being responsible for what we do to others, etc. The first step for having a strong nation is that every individual kills his/her inside enemy. Then we may want to take care of the outside enemies.

Thanks for reading.

All the best,

Mortaza

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Re: Let's learn together!

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I am a new member here. I need help checking my sentences, but I don't know where and how to post my questions or sentences.

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Re: Let's learn together!

Postby behnam » Wed Oct 10, 2012 8:26 am

Hi Mortaza,

Many thanks for putting your essays in this thread. Without any doubt, your essays are useful. You write effectively and interestingly. I really enjoy reading your essays.

About three years ago-for IELTS preparation-I had four courses in an institute in Tehran; concerning four skills: listening, speaking, reading and writing. The courses were really useful. They made my language skills improve significantly, and consequently I scored an average 7.5 out of 9 in IELTS exam. I scored 8 out of 9 in writing module.

I am not going to give you some tips in this public place, since it may affect your morale negatively, or even may hurt your feeling. However, there are some rules in essay writing which should be followed(va man heyfam miyad nagam). Following those rules will cause you to increase your writing band in exams.

For example, it is important to have a Five-Paragraph essay format. This format is so common both in TOEFL and IELTS. In this format the first paragraph is used for introducing(introduction). You should rephrase the topic in this paragraph and make it seem more interesting for readers to get interested in reading the essay. If the topic question is about your personal opinion about something, you should also give your opinion clearly(agree or disagree) in this paragraph and make the readers know the supporting reasons you are going to give in the next paragraphs. You ought to have three reasons for your idea. Those three reasons will be discussed in more details with other supporting sentences in three independent paragraphs.

In the second paragraph, you should write about your first reasons. The first sentence of this paragraph is made from your first reason and it is the topic sentence of paragraph. You have to write some sentences about the first reason; trying to support it with some evidence, examples, or some logical statements.

In the third and fourth paragraph, you should write about the second reason(mentioned in the first paragraph) and the third reason(mentioned in the first paragraph) respectively.

Finally, in the last paragraph, you should again write a sentence with different words about your three reasons which you have mentioned in the first paragraph. The key words of this sentence are your three reasons, but the words are different(noun, adjective, verb which can be made by the root of words e.g. improving, improvement, improved, ..). You shouldn't directly disagree or agree with the main question of topic again. It is done indirectly.

Among three paragraphs, you should obviously use linking phrases such as, in addition to that, firstly, secondly, finally, In the first place,..

When the topic is asking about advantages and disadvantages of something, you shouldn't write your opinion in the first paragraph. If you believe the advantages are more than the disadvantages, you should first write one paragraph about disadvantages, and two paragraphs about disadvantages. In this case, the conclusion paragraph(the last one) is always close to the side you are supporting. Plus, in this case, you have to give your idea directly in the last paragraph by proper sentences such as, 'In my opinion, the advantages of ..weigh its disadvantages....'.

I hope it helps.

I am in a hurry. Alas I have no time to check this post to correct my mistakes. I have to leave my office quickly. Sorry for mistakes. If you need more explanation, just let me know.

All the best,
Behnam, 10 October, 2012



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