A ROSE & A HELL

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Thu Apr 17, 2014 7:41 pm

when be toghter
and life leave us for ever
i'll hold ur tear and draw your smile

when sun hugs moon
and starts say ture
i'll chase u

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu Apr 17, 2014 8:42 pm

i'm ur sun, ur my moon
when can i meet u in fact
i'll fold earth and get u soon
and we'll make our pact
............
urs
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:06 pm

come my sun and shine my days
i'm waiting for long nights
come and let me have new page

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:18 pm

i'll break through ur room's wall
cuddle u to heal my thirsty
and jade ur perfume, my doll
to find out my love busty
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:31 pm

no more u win this time

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:43 pm

in all cases u win
u inspire me to sin
u teach me to defies all
u teach me to be tall
to go up and catch the sky
to have wings and fly


thnx
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Fri Apr 18, 2014 4:26 pm

Hello my friend:
I want write poem please help me and corect the wrong.
When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?

Thanks. I wait your coment.
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Sat Apr 19, 2014 12:51 pm

farah wrote:When I reech my aim?
When I not feel the same?
When I get no blame?


hello farah:
first of all i wana apologize koz i'm late but at last i'm here now; some mistakes as i think:
reech= reach and there're some grammar mistakes so i'll write ur lines as i think the correct:
when can i reach my aim? or : when shall i reach my aim?
when i won't feel the same?
when will i get no blame?

really u wrote so lovely lines, you needed just some correction but at all you could say sth expressing.
i look forward to read more from you
have nice moments.
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Sun Apr 27, 2014 12:22 pm

hello shakespear...i want to thank you very much because you review my lines and finally i could issue these lines....thank you because you did me this favor..my lines:

you broke my stem...it's unfair
we're happy couple, we're sweet pair
how long do i have to wait?
you know you are my soul's mate...

i hope i can write another lines...of course with the help of my friends..
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Mon Apr 28, 2014 10:57 am

Hi farah.... U r welcome
I look 4ward to hearing from u... I'll help u... Its my pleasure 2 help u
Go ahead & lets read ur other lines
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Fri May 02, 2014 8:37 pm

shakespear wrote:Go ahead & lets read ur other lines


really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem
THANKS LOTS SHAKESPEAR
SEE YOU SOOOOOOOOOOOON
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Fri May 02, 2014 9:04 pm

farah wrote:really I have problem with the topic of the poem which I want to write... If you help me may be I can start my poem

ok listen farah...we start days b4 a game to start with a word or a line which determine the topic and we begin to compose about it...and u can review the comments i with dreamer...i think u r online now...so y don't u start with :
do i only feel sad ?
have nice moments...
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby farah » Fri May 02, 2014 9:43 pm

shakespear wrote:do i only feel sad ?


mmm ok so you want me to start with this line, right???
ok let me start:
Do I only feel sad?
Or all the world with me?
Are you also sad?
If not, you are bad.

hahahah... so what do you think about this poem??
I think it's so lovely game
I'm waiting your comment............
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Sat May 03, 2014 2:33 pm

Sorry net was cut... Really i think u start writing lines ...u can complete it with many lines but be careful with grammar& dictation& meaning
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Mon May 05, 2014 8:19 am

if ur online just start ur lines

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Mon May 05, 2014 9:16 am

Wt u wana me start with? Choose any thing.. U know my ability.. Ok?
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Tue May 06, 2014 11:55 am

i mean let's play our game

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Tue May 06, 2014 12:42 pm

Ok.... But really if u try a poem it'll be better... Ok :
Will you really go far away?
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Wed May 07, 2014 7:04 am

no wrods to say
no lyrics to sing

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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby shakespear » Wed May 07, 2014 7:56 am

No words to say
No games to play
No lyrics to sing
To fly, you need a wing
.......
I asked u to write long poem... I'm sure u can do it easily BUT may be u r a bit lazy & that's all
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Re: A ROSE & A HELL

Postby dreamer » Wed May 07, 2014 10:20 am

no words to say
no games to play
no lyrics to sing
to fly you need a wing
to love you need passion
to live you need to dream
no words to say but i'm sure there are games to play

what do you think about


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